Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, pronunciation of tense/number, and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Correct past tense and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'I didn't have', 'my older brother had', 'my friends who had bikes'). Avoid redundancy and keep it to maximum 3–4 short sentences.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My older brother had one, so I often borrowed it to ride with him. Also, I spent time with friends who had bikes, and we rode around the neighborhood on weekends.

제안: Make the answer more natural and specific. Use a clear topic sentence, then provide one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'also'). Fix awkward phrases and word order (e.g., 'children with bikes of different shapes, colors and sizes'). Avoid filler words like 'maybe'.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many families buy them for their children. For example, almost every neighborhood has kids riding bikes of different shapes, colors and sizes, and there are also community bike lanes in some cities.

× No I didn't have a bike when I were I was a child but my older brother has 1 and I was hanging out with my friends that has bikes either.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but my older brother had one and I hung out with my friends who had bikes, too.

Multiple past-tense errors: 'were I was a child' mixes forms; correct is 'was a child' (past of be). 'has 1' should be past 'had one' to match the past timeframe. 'I was hanging out' can be simple past 'I hung out' for a habitual past action. 'that has bikes' should be 'who had bikes' because 'friends' (people) use 'who' and past tense 'had'. Also use 'too' or 'as well' rather than 'either' in positive statements. Suggestions: keep all verbs in the past when describing past situations, use 'who' for people, use 'one' instead of '1' in formal writing, and use commas to separate clauses.

× Yes, I think they are popular in my country because in every neighborhood there is a child with a bike that it's with several shapes, colors maybe and sizes also.

✓ Yes, I think they are popular in my country because in every neighborhood there is a child with a bike, and they come in various shapes, colors, and sizes.

Awkward phrasing and incorrect use of 'that it's with' and placement of ideas. Use 'they come in' or 'they are available in' to describe variations. 'Maybe' is unnecessary and informal here. Also replace 'a child with a bike that it's with several shapes' with a clear clause: 'they come in various shapes, colors, and sizes.' Suggestions: use natural collocations like 'come in' to list variations, remove redundant words, and use plural reference 'they' to refer back to 'bikes.'