Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is too short and lacks development. Start with a direct topic sentence and then add one or two brief supporting details (reason, brief memory, or contrast) using a linking word. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, my parents preferred that I walk or take public transport because our neighborhood was quite busy. However, I sometimes borrowed a cousin’s bike on weekends, which I enjoyed.

제안: Your answer has a basic opinion but is unclear and slightly incoherent. Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific examples or reasons and use linking words (for example, however, because). Also avoid vague phrases like “this bike” — name types or brands clearly and explain why they are popular.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in smaller cities and among commuters. For example, in City 70 many people prefer motorbikes because they are affordable and help avoid traffic. In addition, brands like Honda are particularly common because they are reliable and have good service networks.

× Yes, they are very popular in my country such as City 70. Honda is much more popular than this bike.

✓ Yes, they are very popular in my country, for example in City 70. Hondas are much more popular than this bike.

The original contains a vague demonstrative reference and inconsistent noun number. 'Such as City 70' is better expressed as 'for example in City 70' to show location. 'Honda' as a brand name used to refer to models should be plural when comparing general popularity (Hondas are more popular). Also the phrase 'much more popular than this bike' compares singular to plural; making 'Hondas are much more popular than this bike' clarifies the comparison. Suggestion: use clear connectors for examples and match singular/plural forms when making comparisons.