Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on clarity, accuracy and concise structure. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I had a bike), correct mistakes (bike, not bite; I lived, not I were), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences and avoid irrelevant words.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I grew up in Kowloon and lived in a building near a park, so I often rode my bike there with friends. Because the park was close, I practiced cycling almost every day and became quite confident on roads nearby.

제안: Answer directly and use correct vocabulary and linking words. Say Yes or No and follow with a clear reason and one specific example. Fix word choice errors (bikes, not birds) and grammar (many people enjoy cycling). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and keep it brief and relevant.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people enjoy cycling for exercise and travel. For example, in mountainous areas people often ride bikes to explore trails and combine cycling with hiking, which has increased demand for mountain bikes.

× Umm yes I had a bite when I was a child.

✓ Umm yes I had a bike when I was a child.

The student wrote 'bite' instead of 'bike', which is a wrong lexical choice, not a grammatical comparison—however it makes the sentence incorrect. Correct word 'bike' fits the intended meaning. Suggestion: proofread for homophone and spelling errors.

× Like when I were a child I was living in Kowloon and my buildings names park and toy and there is a park near that building in.

✓ When I was a child I lived in Kowloon. My building's name was Park and Toy, and there was a park near the building.

Multiple tense and agreement issues: 'were' is incorrect with singular subject 'I' in past tense; use 'was'. 'Was living' can be simplified to 'lived' to match simple past narrative. 'My buildings names' is ungrammatical; use possessive 'my building's name' and past verb 'was'. 'There is a park near that building in' mixes present tense and incorrect preposition placement; use past tense 'there was a park near the building'. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense when describing past events, use correct subject-verb agreement for 'I was', and use possessive forms for names.

× Yes, I think birds are popular in my country because in my country there are a lot of mountain people gain cycling and cycle and hike in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because many people who live in the mountains enjoy cycling and hiking.

The sentence has several lexical and grammatical problems: 'birds' is a wrong word for 'bikes' (lexical error). 'Mountain people gain cycling' is ungrammatical; 'many people who live in the mountains' is a clearer adjectival phrase. Use 'enjoy cycling and hiking' (verbs) rather than 'gain cycling and cycle and hike'. Also avoid repeating 'in my country'. Suggestions: choose correct nouns ('bikes'), use descriptive clauses 'people who live in the mountains', and use appropriate verbs ('enjoy cycling and hiking').