Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your response did not directly answer the question asked. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question (e.g., "Yes, I did" or "No, I didn't") and then add one or two specific supporting details. Keep answers natural, concise (no more than 4–5 sentences), and use linking words (for example, "because", "so", "when"). Avoid repeating the examiner's question.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a simple red bicycle that my parents bought me when I was seven, and I used it to go to school and visit friends. Because the streets near my home were quiet, I learned to ride fast and confidently. As a result, cycling became one of my favourite childhood activities.

제안: Your answer directly addresses the question and gives local detail, which is good. Improve coherence and fluency by using a clear topic sentence followed by linked supporting points. Combine short sentences with linking words (e.g., "for example", "because", "so") and add one specific example or brief reason to strengthen your response. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid minor grammar slips (e.g., say "the city I grew up in" instead of "came up from").

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in smaller cities. For example, in the city I grew up in, Hariza, almost every household owned at least one bicycle because roads are narrow and bikes are cheap and convenient. Therefore, many children used bikes to travel to school and markets.

× Specifically the city that I came up from is in northern Somalia.

✓ Specifically, the city I came from is in northern Somalia.

This sentence has an awkward structure: 'came up from' is informal and the relative clause word order is clumsy. The issue fits 'Sentence structure errors' (ID 26). Use the reduced relative clause 'the city I came from' and add a comma after 'Specifically' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary words like 'up' in this context and place commas to separate introductory adverbials.

× So growing up as a child, everybody around me had a bike.

✓ When I was growing up, everybody around me had a bike.

The original sentence begins with 'So growing up as a child,' which is wordy and slightly awkward. This is a sentence structure/tense usage issue (map to Present tense issue ID 6 or Sentence structure ID 26); 'When I was growing up' is the natural time clause to introduce a past habitual situation. Keep 'had' (past simple) because it describes a past habitual state. Suggestion: use 'When I was growing up' or 'Growing up' at the start, not 'So growing up as a child.'