Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and natural, with a direct response and supporting details. To improve, make the response a bit more concise and add a linking phrase to connect the two sentences smoothly. Also include a brief specific detail (e.g., age or memory) to enrich content without exceeding five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. In fact I learned to ride when I was about six, and my mother taught me in the small park near our house. As a result, I became one of the first kids in our colony who could ride confidently.

제안: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons, but it has some hesitations, slightly awkward phrasing, and lacks coherence. Improve clarity by using smoother linking words, correcting grammar (e.g., 'short bikes' -> 'small bicycles' or 'children's bikes'), and giving one clear reason followed by a specific example. Keep it within five sentences.

예시: I think bicycles are fairly common among children and people with limited budgets because they are inexpensive. However, many urban roads are not bike-friendly and lack dedicated lanes, so cycling can be unsafe for adults. Therefore, bikes are less popular for daily commuting in my city.

× At a young age short bikes are popular in younger people or mostly people who cannot afford uh motorcycle or vehicles like cars.

✓ At a young age, short bikes are popular among younger people, or mostly among people who cannot afford motorcycles or vehicles like cars.

The original sentence has number agreement and preposition issues. 'among' is the correct preposition to indicate a group; 'younger people or mostly people' is awkward—use 'among younger people, or mostly among people'. 'motorcycle' should be plural 'motorcycles' to match 'people who cannot afford' (general plural reference). Use commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× At a young age short bikes are popular in younger people or mostly people who cannot afford uh motorcycle or vehicles like cars.

✓ At a young age, short bikes are popular among younger people, or mostly among people who cannot afford motorcycles or vehicles like cars.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect for describing popularity within a group. Use 'among' to show something is common within a group. Also add 'among' before the second noun phrase for parallel structure.

× At a young age short bikes are popular in younger people or mostly people who cannot afford uh motorcycle or vehicles like cars.

✓ At a young age, short bikes are popular among younger people, or mostly among people who cannot afford motorcycles or vehicles like cars.

The sentence is long and uncoordinated: 'At a young age short bikes are popular in younger people or mostly people who cannot afford...' Rephrase for clear parallel structure: 'popular among younger people, or mostly among people who cannot afford...' This improves readability and grammatical correctness.

× But otherwise the roads are not very bike friendly so I don't think it is safe, which is why they are maybe not that popular.

✓ But otherwise the roads are not very bike-friendly, so I don't think it is safe, which is why bikes may not be that popular.

The pronoun 'they' is unclear—referent should be 'bikes'. Also 'it is safe' is vague; use 'they are safe' or 'bikes are safe'. 'Maybe' placement is awkward; 'may not be' is more natural. Hyphenate 'bike-friendly' as a compound adjective.

× But otherwise the roads are not very bike friendly so I don't think it is safe, which is why they are maybe not that popular.

✓ But otherwise the roads are not very bike-friendly, so I don't think it is safe, which is why bikes may not be that popular.

'Bike friendly' should be hyphenated as 'bike-friendly' when used as a modifier. 'Maybe not that popular' is informal and awkwardly placed; 'may not be that popular' is grammatically better. Also ensure agreement: 'it is safe' should match plural subject 'bikes' or refer explicitly to 'riding bikes'.