Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrasing (e.g., “a toy”) and grammar errors (e.g., “parents choice” → “my parents’ choice”).

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents preferred we use public transport because we lived in a busy city, so I usually walked or took the bus to school. As a result, I never learned to ride confidently.

제안: Remove fillers and strengthen the explanation with a clear reason and a specific example or consequence. Use linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘for example’, ‘therefore’) and a more precise observation instead of vague claims like “every second person.”

예시: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in my country because more people choose them for short trips and exercise. For example, I often see many commuters and delivery riders on bicycles during rush hour, which indicates increasing interest in cycling and cycling infrastructure.

× No, I didn't have a bike as a child because it was my parents choice and we lived in a city so I liked it to use another alternative for it like walking or a bus or a toy.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike as a child because it was my parents' choice and we lived in a city, so I preferred other alternatives like walking or taking a bus.

Errors: missing possessive apostrophe in 'parents choice' and awkward/incorrect preposition and phrasing 'liked it to use another alternative for it like' and unnecessary word 'toy'. Corrections: add possessive to show ownership ('parents''), replace 'liked it to use another alternative for it' with 'preferred other alternatives' for natural verb and noun usage, and use correct verb + preposition 'taking a bus'. Suggestion: use concise phrases for preference (prefer + noun or prefer + verb-ing) and standard prepositions for transport (take/taking a bus).

× Yes, I do think that bikes have recently become popular in my country because, uh, when I take a stroll on the street, every second person has a bike. That shows how much the value of bikes is increasing.

✓ Yes, I do think that bikes have recently become popular in my country because, when I take a stroll on the street, every other person has a bike. That shows how much the popularity of bikes is increasing.

Errors: 'every second person' is nonstandard in this context — use 'every other person' to mean 'one in every two people'. 'Value of bikes' is semantically odd; 'popularity' fits the intended meaning. Also removed filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: use standard expressions for frequency ('every other') and choose nouns that match meaning ('popularity' rather than 'value').