Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation and repetition, and give relevant supporting details (who taught you, where you learned, a specific memory). Keep answers concise (maximum 5 sentences) and use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'and', 'so', 'because', 'after').

예시: I had a purple bike when I was a child. My father taught me to ride it in our neighborhood park, and I learned in less than a day because he practiced with me every afternoon. I still remember the excitement of riding without training wheels for the first time, which made it a great experience.

제안: Give a direct opinion sentence then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, 'because', 'for instance', 'also') and avoid vague phrases like 'any social media.' Mention contexts where bikes are popular (commuting, leisure, sport) and give a brief comparison or result.

예시: Yes, I believe bikes are quite popular in the Philippines because many people use them for commuting and exercise. For instance, there are numerous cycling clubs on Facebook and organized weekend rides in urban areas, and during the pandemic more people started biking to avoid crowded public transport.

× I remember umm, learning how to write I how to write it in less than a day.

✓ I remember learning how to ride it in less than a day.

The original sentence repeats phrases ('how to write I how to write') and uses the wrong verb 'write' instead of 'ride' given the context about a bike; this is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and word choice. Remove the repetition and use the correct verb. Suggested improvement: plan your sentence before speaking, and use the verb that matches the context (ride for bicycles).

× I think yes, bikes are popular in my country which is the Philippines since I have seen many bike clubs in Facebook groups or in any social media.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, the Philippines, because I have seen many bike clubs on Facebook and other social media.

The sentence contains a misplaced conjunction/structure and an unnecessary relative clause 'which is the Philippines' that disrupts flow; this is an incorrect conjunction/ sentence structure issue (ID 16 and 26). Also preposition use with platforms should be 'on Facebook' (ID 11). 'Since' as a causal connector can be used but 'because' is clearer. Suggested improvement: place country name in commas as an appositive, use 'because' to show reason, and use 'on' with social media platform names.