Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add 1–2 concise supporting details. Correct verb tenses and possessive structure (e.g., “my mother bought/gave me”). Avoid repetition and sentence fragments. Use linking words (e.g., “and”, “so”, “because”) to connect details naturally.

예시: Yes. My mother gave me a pink bicycle for my birthday when I was a child. It had a small bell and I enjoyed riding it around the neighborhood because it made me feel independent and my friends thought it looked lovely.

제안: Make answers more coherent and grammatically correct. Begin with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons and examples using linking words like “because”, “for example”, or “so”. Correct awkward phrases (e.g., “my bike took class every day” → “I rode my bike to school every day”). Keep to 3–4 sentences and be specific about who chooses cycling and why.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient. For example, when I was at school I rode my bike to class every day to save money on transport. Today many people still choose cycling to avoid traffic congestion and stay healthy.

× Yes I had to buy my mother gifted me on my birthday.

✓ Yes, I had a bike that my mother gifted me on my birthday.

Original sentence has missing and misordered words causing unclear meaning. 'had to buy' implies obligation which is not intended. A relative clause 'that my mother gifted me' correctly links the gift to the bike. Add commas and articles for clarity.

× I. I love riding it around my neighborhood and everyone was impressed with it.

✓ I loved riding it around my neighborhood and everyone was impressed with it.

The speaker refers to a past time (childhood), so present tense 'love' is inconsistent. Use past tense 'loved' to match 'was impressed'. Also remove the stray period and duplicate 'I'.

× When I was at school, I used to ride.

✓ When I was at school, I used to ride my bike.

The verb phrase 'used to ride' needs an object to be clear. Adding 'my bike' specifies the activity and maintains past habitual tense.

× My bike took class every day because it was cheaper than meal and many people today still choose.

✓ I took my bike to class every day because it was cheaper than taking a bus or other transport, and many people today still choose to cycle.

Sentence has several structural errors: 'My bike took class' incorrectly assigns action to the bike instead of the student. 'Cheaper than meal' is nonsensical; context likely compares to other transport. Also 'still choose' needs an object or infinitive ('to cycle'). Rewriting clarifies subject-action, corrects comparison, and completes the verb phrase.

× Cycle to avoid traffic congestion and save money on transport.

✓ People cycle to avoid traffic congestion and save money on transport.

The imperative 'Cycle to...' is odd in this context; the sentence should describe a general habit. Adding subject 'People' makes it a general statement. Alternatively, 'They cycle' would also be acceptable.