Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I did) and correct basic grammar (age phrasing, verb choice). Avoid repetition and filler words (uh, I, I). Give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, after receiving it, I rode daily to the park). Keep answers to no more than five sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. I got a red bicycle for my sixth birthday from my parents. After that, I rode it almost every day, usually to the nearby park and around my neighborhood. Riding helped me make friends and stay active.

제안: Answer directly and use clear reasons. Start with a clear opinion (No, they are not very popular). Then give 1–2 specific reasons and use linking words (because, for example, however). Avoid vague repetition and filler words. Use precise vocabulary (infrastructure, bike lanes, public awareness). Keep it within five sentences.

예시: No, bikes are not very popular in my country because there is a lack of cycling infrastructure such as dedicated bike lanes and secure parking. For example, many streets are busy and unsafe for cyclists, so most people prefer motorbikes or cars instead.

× Uh, yes, I've never, I was a six years old.

✓ Uh, yes, I was six years old.

The original sentence mixes present perfect 'I've never' with a past time expression and uses an incorrect article 'a' before the age. This is a sentence structure and article/number error. Use simple past 'I was six years old' to answer a past-time question and omit the indefinite article before an age expression. Suggestion: say 'I was six years old.'

× My parents decided to buy a red bicycle for me on my birthday.

✓ My parents decided to buy a red bicycle for me for my birthday.

The tense 'decided' is correct for a past event, but the preposition is wrong: use 'for my birthday' to indicate purpose/time of gift. This is a preposition choice in a past-tense sentence. Suggestion: replace 'on' with 'for' when speaking about gifts given for an occasion.

× After that, I, I spent, uh, I spent uh, most of uh, the time, most of the time with uh, uh, writing, uh, my bicycle.

✓ After that, I spent most of my time riding my bicycle.

The original is disfluent and uses the wrong verb 'writing' instead of 'riding' and an incorrect preposition phrase 'with the time'. This is a sentence structure and word choice error. Use 'spent most of my time' + verb-ing to describe an ongoing past activity: 'spent most of my time riding my bicycle.' Remove fillers and duplicate phrases.

× I actually have enough my country.

✓ I actually live in my country.

The sentence is ungrammatical—'have enough my country' is not correct. Likely the student intended to say where they live. This is a present-tense and sentence structure error. Use 'I actually live in my country' or 'In my country' depending on context.

× There are here, there are, there are, there are, and there are, there are not enough facilities for riding bicycle.

✓ There are not enough facilities for riding bicycles here.

The original repeats 'there are' many times and lacks correct article/plural form: use 'riding bicycles' or 'for cyclists' and place 'here' at the end. This is a sentence structure and singular/plural/article issue. Suggestion: simplify to 'There are not enough facilities for riding bicycles here.'

× Uh, so, uh, it is, uh, not uh, the popular, popular in, uh, in my country.

✓ So, it is not very popular in my country.

The phrase 'the popular' is incorrect here; 'popular' is an adjective and should be modified by 'very' or 'particularly' rather than the definite article. This is a present-tense and article/adjective usage error. Suggestion: say 'it is not very popular in my country.'