Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is direct but too short and lacks detail. To improve, give a clear topic sentence then add one or two supporting details (e.g., what kind of bike, who you rode with, a short memory). Use a linking word to connect ideas and keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences. Also avoid fillers like "uh."

예시: Yes, I did — I had a small red bicycle with training wheels when I was six. I used to ride it every afternoon around the neighborhood with my older brother, which helped me become confident on two wheels.

제안: Your response answers the question but is disorganized, contains hesitations and grammar errors. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons or examples, using linking words (for example, because, for instance). Correct grammar (e.g., "I always see" not "I always saw"), avoid repetition, and limit to 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, I often see many children riding small red or white bikes in parks and on sidewalks, especially in the afternoons. I believe they are popular because they are affordable and a healthy way for kids to exercise.

× Yeah, I had one.

✓ Yeah, I had one.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses past tense to answer a past possession question. (Kept for completeness.)

× Yeah, I think they are 'cause every time I walk outside I uh, always saw some children with their little bikes like red bike, white bike and they were are pretty cool, pretty cute.

✓ Yeah, I think they are, because every time I walk outside I always see some children with their little bikes, like red bikes and white bikes, and they are pretty cool and pretty cute.

Multiple present/past tense and word order issues: 'are' is fine but 'cause' should be expanded to 'because' for formality; 'every time I walk outside' sets a habitual present context, so the verb should be present simple 'see' not past 'saw' (Past tense issue -> Present tense issue). 'always' should come before the verb 'see' for correct adverb placement. 'like red bike, white bike' needs plural agreement and parallel structure ('red bikes and white bikes'). The phrase 'they were are' is a duplication and should be 'they are'. Suggestions: use consistent present tense for habitual situations, place adverbs correctly ('I always see'), ensure noun-adjective agreement and parallel lists ('red bikes and white bikes'), and remove duplicated words.

× So I think uh, it is really popular for children like a sport.

✓ So I think, uh, they are really popular among children as a sport.

Original sentence uses 'it is' which disagrees with the preceding plural subject 'bikes' and is awkwardly phrased. Use 'they are' to match plural 'bikes' (subject-verb agreement). Also use 'among children' rather than 'for children' in this context, and 'as a sport' is a clearer expression than 'like a sport'. Suggestions: match verb number to the subject ('they are'), choose appropriate preposition ('among'), and use 'as' to indicate role or function ('as a sport').