Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two precise supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler words (e.g., "like", repeated "because"). Use correct grammar for clarity (e.g., "it had four wheels because I didn't know how to ride"). Keep your response within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink because that was my favourite colour, and it had four wheels because I hadn't learned to balance on two wheels yet. I enjoyed riding it around my neighbourhood.

제안: Start with a direct opinion, then give one or two clear reasons using linking words (e.g., "however", "because", "nowadays"). Remove hesitations like "uh" and reduce redundancy (avoid repeating "nowadays"). Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "fewer bikes", "automobiles" is fine but "cars" is simpler). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I think bikes are less common now than before. When I was younger many people used bicycles for daily travel, but nowadays there are fewer bikes because more people own cars; currently many people mainly cycle for exercise.

× it had like 2 wheels and two more wheels because of I because I didn't know how to ride a bicycle back then.

✓ It had two extra training wheels because I didn't know how to ride a bicycle back then.

The original mixes numerals and phrasing awkwardly and uses '2 wheels and two more wheels' which is redundant. Also 'because of I' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'two extra training wheels' to correctly express plurality and clarity. Use consistent number words and remove redundant parts.

× So I had four wheels in my bike so that it it makes easy for me to ride.

✓ So my bike had four wheels so it was easier for me to ride.

Original has repeated word 'it it' and incorrect tense/structure 'so that it it makes easy for me to ride.' Use simple past 'was' and comparative 'easier' to match past-time context and correct sentence structure.

× When I was young, I used to see a lot of people riding bikes, but nowadays as the uh, as the number of cars and more automobiles have increased, I have seen less amount of bikes running and nowadays people just use bikes for physical fitness.

✓ When I was young, I used to see a lot of people riding bikes, but nowadays, as the number of cars and other automobiles has increased, I see fewer bikes on the road and people mostly use bikes for exercise.

Mixed tenses and incorrect quantifier used: 'have increased' can be 'has increased' because 'number' is singular; maintain present simple 'I see' for current observation. 'Less amount of bikes' is incorrect; use 'fewer bikes' for countable nouns. Replace 'physical fitness' with more natural 'exercise.' Remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'nowadays.'

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was pink in colour because at that time pink was my favorite colour and it had like 2 wheels and two more wheels because of I because I didn't know how to ride a bicycle back then.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was pink because pink was my favorite color then, and it had two extra training wheels because I didn't know how to ride a bicycle.

Pronoun and referent repetition and awkward phrasing: remove unnecessary repetitions of 'because' and use pronouns correctly. Also simplify 'in colour' to 'color' (US) or keep 'colour' (UK) consistently; here 'color' chosen. Clarify 'two extra training wheels' instead of repeating wheels. Ensure pronouns clearly refer to their antecedents.