Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and natural phrasing, and add a brief supporting detail. Use a clear topic sentence and one or two linked supporting sentences. For example, correct tense and articles: say “When I was a child” and add a reason or brief consequence using a linking word such as “because” or “so.”

예시: When I was a child, I did not have a bike because my parents thought it was unsafe. As a result, I usually walked to school or took the bus, which made me less independent than my friends.

제안: Organise your response with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetition, and use linking words to present specific reasons. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and use concise vocabulary. For example, start with a direct statement, then give two clear reasons linked by words such as “because” or “so.”

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because cities are crowded and traffic congestion is common. For example, many commuters use motorcycles or bicycles to reach work faster and to save money on fuel.

× When I was child, I did not have a bike because my parents didn't allow me.

✓ When I was a child, I did not have a bike because my parents didn't allow me to have one.

The original sentence misses the article 'a' before 'child' (article error/structure) and ends with an incomplete verb phrase 'allow me' which requires an object or infinitive to be clear. Add 'a' and complete the idea with 'to have one' to make the sentence grammatical and clear.

× In my country, bikes are very popular due to increased population.

✓ In my country, bikes are very popular due to the increasing population.

The phrase 'increased population' is awkward here; 'the increasing population' correctly uses a noun phrase that describes a growing population causing greater bike use. This fixes word choice and agreement between the modifier and the noun.

× Traffic jams are uh, has become a global concern and in my locality due to this uh, thing, bike are very Bikes are very, uh, beneficial for those people who go to their jobs to do.

✓ Traffic jams have become a global concern, and in my locality, because of this, bikes are very beneficial for people who commute to work.

Multiple issues: 'Traffic jams are has become' mixes plural subject with singular verb — correct form is 'Traffic jams have become' (subject-verb agreement and tense). 'Due to this thing' is informal and unclear; use 'because of this'. 'Bike are very' has incorrect plural agreement; use 'bikes are'. The phrase 'those people who go to their jobs to do' is redundant and ungrammatical; 'people who commute to work' is concise and correct. Combined corrections address subject-verb agreement, plurality, word choice, and sentence structure.