Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, tense consistency and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, use correct article and adjective order, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail and a linking word to connect ideas. Avoid redundant phrases like “nearest area.”

예시: Yes, I did. I had a black Splendor Plus when I was a child, and I often rode it to visit my friends who lived nearby. Because it was reliable and easy to maintain, I used it almost every weekend for short errands.

제안: Make the answer more natural and specific, correct grammar and word choice, and add a linking word to connect reason and example. Replace vague group labels with clearer descriptions and provide one concrete example or statistic if possible.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are fuel-efficient and inexpensive to maintain. For example, many office commuters prefer motorcycles to avoid traffic and save on petrol costs during daily travel.

× I have a bike which is a splendor plus.

✓ I had a bike which was a Splendor Plus.

Tense consistency: The question asks about childhood (past). The student used present tense 'have' and 'is'; these should be past tense 'had' and 'was'. Also Splendor Plus is a proper noun and should be capitalized. Suggestion: Use past tense when referring to past possessions and capitalize brand names.

× It has black color and I usually use it for visiting my nearest area such as my friend's house.

✓ It was black, and I usually used it to visit nearby places such as my friend's house.

Word choice and collocation: English speakers usually say 'black' or 'black in color', not 'black color'. Also 'use it for visiting my nearest area' is unnatural; use 'use it to visit nearby places'. Tense consistency: change 'has' and 'use' to past tense 'was' and 'used' to match past time frame. Suggestion: Say 'It was black' or 'It was black in color', and 'I used it to visit nearby places.'

× They are especially used by person who are in corporate jobs.

✓ They are especially used by people who are in corporate jobs.

Count and agreement: 'person' is singular while 'they' refers to plural; use 'people'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'who are' is correct with 'people'. Suggestion: Use 'people' when referring to more than one person: 'used by people who work in corporate jobs.'

× They are especially used by person who are in corporate jobs.

✓ They are especially used by people who are in corporate jobs.

Subject-verb agreement detail: In the original, 'person who are' mismatches number and verb form; if singular 'person who is' would be required. Because context requires plural (people), keep 'are'. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun and verb number match: 'people who are.'