Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details (e.g., what kind of bike, where you rode it, a memory). Avoid repetition (don’t say “cycle” and “bicycle” and “I had one” multiple times). Use linking words if you add details (e.g., “and”, “for example”, “so”).

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle as a child. It was a small red bike with stabilisers, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon with my friends.

제안: Give a clearer, structured response: state your opinion, then add specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., “because”, “for example”, “also”). Avoid filler words (“like”, “uh”) and vague phrases (“any other purposes”); be specific about reasons (transport, cost, exercise) and groups who use bikes.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient. For example, many schoolchildren and teenagers ride bicycles to school, and adults often use them for short trips or exercise.

× Like they all use, uh, these bicycles for going to schools or any other purposes.

✓ They all use these bicycles to go to school or for other purposes.

The original uses 'for going to schools' which is awkward: after 'use' the infinitive 'to go' is more natural. Also 'schools' should be singular when referring to the activity 'go to school' in English. Replace 'for any other purposes' with 'for other purposes' for concision and correct preposition use.

× Yeah, it is. Bikes are popular in my country, like basically around small children and around teenagers.

✓ Yes, they are. Bikes are popular in my country, especially among young children and teenagers.

The speaker used 'it is' to refer to 'bikes' (plural), causing a pronoun/verb number mismatch; use 'they are'. 'Around' is not the best preposition here; 'among' is appropriate for groups. 'Small children' is less natural than 'young children', and 'especially' is more idiomatic than 'like basically'.

× Yeah, I did have one when I was a child. It was like a cycle, a bicycle which had two wheels on the side for the support.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child. It was a bicycle with two training wheels for support.

Use 'Yes, I had' instead of 'I did have' for a natural simple past answer. 'Like a cycle, a bicycle' is repetitive; 'bicycle' suffices. 'Two wheels on the side for the support' is awkward: 'training wheels' is the correct term, and 'for support' is more concise than 'for the support'.