Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and direct, which is good. To improve, use a more natural formal response (avoid fillers like “Nope”) and add one or two brief supporting details using linking words (e.g., “because” or “but”) to enrich the response without exceeding length limits. Keep sentences concise and avoid colloquial pauses.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family could not afford one. However, I often borrowed neighbors' bikes to ride with friends on weekends.

제안: Your answer shows a relevant idea but is very disfluent and repetitive. To improve: (1) Organize into a clear topic sentence stating your opinion; (2) Use linking words (for example, “because” and “for example”) to structure supporting details; (3) Remove fillers (umm, like) and repetitions; (4) Be specific—give one concrete reason or example and finish the sentence. Limit to 3–4 sentences total.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many children learn to ride a bicycle before they try scooters or motorcycles. For example, when I was about 13, my friends and I regularly rode bikes around the neighborhood for exercise and fun.

× I think so yeah, because umm, most of it most of the people here use umm like they use before they even learn how to use scooters or motorcycles, they would learn how to use bikes, birds, so umm also the people around my age when we were when I was like 13 or.

✓ I think so, because most people here learn to ride a bicycle before they learn to use scooters or motorcycles; when I was around 13, the people my age had already learned to ride bikes.

The original sentence contains multiple issues, primarily run-on sentence and unclear phrasing (Grammar problem type ID 26: Sentence structure errors). Repeated words ('most of it most of the people') and filler sounds ('umm') create redundancy and interrupt flow. The clause order is confused ('they use umm like they use before they even learn how to use scooters or motorcycles'). I simplified and reorganized the ideas into two clear clauses: general habit in the country and a personal example. I replaced 'use bikes' with 'learn to ride a bicycle' for natural collocation and removed the stray word 'birds'. Suggestion: avoid filler sounds, remove repetitions, break long run-on sentences into shorter clauses, and use common collocations (learn to ride) to improve clarity.