Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition, give a clear topic sentence, and add specific supporting details using linking words. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences: a direct opinion, a reason or example with a linking word, and a brief contrast if needed. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., commuting, infrastructure, cycling culture) and avoid filler words (uh, umm, you know).

예시: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in Brazil. However, most people I know prefer cars because driving is seen as more convenient and safer for long distances. Nevertheless, in some cities with better bike lanes, cycling is common for commuting and short trips.

× Well, umm, bikes are popular in Brazil.

✓ Well, umm, bikes are popular in Brazil.

No grammatical error; sentence is acceptable. Keep concise and avoid filler words for clarity.

× You know, I'm from Brazil.

✓ I'm from Brazil.

Removing 'You know' reduces unnecessary filler; pronoun use is correct but phrase is colloquial. Suggest saying directly.

× I think they are popular.

✓ I think they are popular.

This sentence is grammatically correct: plural subject 'they' matches plural verb 'are'. No change needed.

× Uh, but although I think they are popular, I don't see many of my friends using them.

✓ Although I think they are popular, I don't see many of my friends using them.

Use either 'but' or 'although', not both together. Remove 'but' before 'although' to avoid redundancy and incorrect sentence structure.

× You know, like most of us, we drive cars.

✓ Like most of us, we drive cars.

Avoid starting with 'You know' which is a filler. Pronoun 'we' is acceptable. Removing filler improves clarity.

× We, we think it's safer when we are a little bit lazy, but depends on where you go to Brazil.

✓ We think it's safer when we're a little lazy, but it depends on where you go in Brazil.

Issues corrected: remove duplicate 'We, we'; use contraction 'we're' or 'we are'; 'a little lazy' is more natural than 'a little bit lazy'; add subject 'it' before 'depends'; use preposition 'in' with 'Brazil'. These changes fix sentence structure and preposition errors.

× People ride their bikes.

✓ People ride their bikes.

This sentence is correct. No grammatical change needed.