Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct small grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., ‘outdoors act outdoor activities’). Also correct tense and article usage: say ‘I wasn’t someone who liked outdoor activities’ and use ‘so’ to connect reasons. Keep answers to 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. I was afraid of falling and preferred walking or playing with dolls, so my parents never bought one for me. As I wasn’t very keen on outdoor activities, I didn’t feel the need for a bike.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to add specifics. Reduce hesitations and filler words (umm, uh). Provide a complete comparison and a concluding opinion. Use specific details (where, age groups, reasons) and avoid unfinished sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country, especially in rural areas and among schoolchildren. However, many children prefer team sports like football and cricket, so cycling is more common for commuting or leisure than competitive play. Overall, biking is popular but less so among kids focused on organized sports.

× I did not have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses past tense 'did not have' and 'was'. No grammatical error.

× It was mainly because I was scared of falling and I preferred walking or playing with dolls more.

✓ It was mainly because I was scared of falling, and I preferred walking or playing with dolls.

Remove the redundant 'more' and add a comma before 'and' joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary comparative adverbs like 'more' when listing preferences.

× And I am not someone who loves outdoors act outdoor activities, so I never wanted a bike from my parents.

✓ I am not someone who loves outdoor activities, so I never asked my parents for a bike.

Errors: 'outdoors act outdoor activities' is ungrammatical word choice and order. Use the adjective 'outdoor' before 'activities'. 'Never wanted a bike from my parents' is awkward; use 'asked my parents for a bike' to express request. Also change 'And I am' to 'I am' to start smoothly. Keep present simple 'am' for a general personal trait.

× That's an interesting question.

✓ That's an interesting question.

No change needed; sentence is grammatically correct.

× Umm, most of the people, most of the children, they prefer uh, for example, the boys, they prefer playing on field, on play, uh, they prefer playing different kinds of sports like football, cricket, umm, and girls, they usually.

✓ Umm, most people, especially most children, prefer outdoor play. For example, boys often prefer playing on the field and enjoy different kinds of sports like football and cricket, while girls usually...

Problems: redundant 'most of the people, most of the children' and unnecessary pronoun 'they' after the noun phrase. 'Playing on field' needs the article 'the field' or 'playing outdoors'. 'On play' is incorrect. Sentence is also incomplete at the end. Suggestions: simplify quantifiers ('most people'), avoid repeating subjects, use correct articles ('the field'), and complete the sentence structure. If continuing, finish the clause about girls (for example 'girls usually prefer...').