Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence variety, be more concise and add a brief specific detail. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct verb tenses and reduce repetition. Use one or two linking words to show sequence or emphasize feeling.

예시: Yes, I did. I learned to ride a bicycle with my dad when I was about seven, and he helped me practice in the park every weekend. It was refreshing and fun because I felt proud each time I managed to ride without falling.

제안: Make the answer more natural and structured: start with a clear opinion, then give two concise, specific reasons with linking words. Fix word order and remove filler words.

예시: Not very popular. Most people prefer public transportation because it is faster and more convenient for commuting, and also the country’s hilly terrain makes cycling difficult in many areas.

× Yes I did. I had a bicycle and I practice with my dad.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bicycle and I practiced with my dad.

The sentence mixes past and present tense. The context is about childhood (past), so the verb 'practice' must be in past tense 'practiced'. Add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity. Suggestion: keep all verbs describing past events in past tense to maintain consistency.

× It was so refreshing whenever I did it with my dad and it was enjoyable.

✓ It was so refreshing whenever I did it with my dad, and it was enjoyable.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs a comma before the conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses. The verbs 'was' and 'did' are correctly in past tense for a past context. Suggestion: add a comma to separate the two independent clauses for correct punctuation and readability.

× No, I don't think so. Like people usually take trans public transportation to commute or go somewhere somewhere because it's more convenient.

✓ No, I don't think so. People usually take public transport to commute or go somewhere because it's more convenient.

The phrase 'trans public transportation' is incorrect word order and redundant. Use 'public transport' or 'public transportation'. Also remove the filler 'like' at the sentence start and the repeated 'somewhere'. Suggestion: choose the correct noun order 'public transport' and avoid filler words and repetition.

× And I think Korea has a lot of mountains so it's hard to ride a bicycle on hills or mountains.

✓ And I think Korea has a lot of mountains, so it's hard to ride a bicycle in hilly or mountainous areas.

The preposition 'on' with 'hills or mountains' is not wrong but 'in' with 'areas' is more natural here. Also 'hilly or mountainous areas' is a clearer adjective use than repeating 'hills or mountains'. Add a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: use 'in hilly or mountainous areas' for natural phrasing and add comma for clause separation.