Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cố gắng trả lời trực tiếp hơn ở câu chủ đề, rút gọn các từ thừa và sửa ngữ pháp để tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ: tránh lặp từ (“ride a bike” nhiều lần), sửa cấu trúc như “I picked it up” thành “I got the hang of it”. Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ tuổi học, cảm xúc hoặc khó khăn) và dùng liên từ như “so” hoặc “then” để nối ý rõ ràng.

예시: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My parents taught me to ride it in the local park when I was seven, and I got the hang of it after about a week, so I rode it to visit friends every weekend.

제안: Tránh sử dụng từ không chính xác như “properly” ở đây và sửa ngữ pháp (động từ số nhiều, giới từ). Nên đưa ví dụ cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để làm rõ ý (for example, because, so). Thêm số liệu hoặc tình huống cụ thể sẽ làm câu thuyết phục hơn.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips. For example, people often cycle to the local market or to visit neighbors, especially in rural areas where distances are short and traffic is light.

× Yes, I learned how to ride a bike when I was a child. At that time my parents taught me how to ride a bike in a park and I just then picked it up after just a week.

✓ Yes, I learned how to ride a bike when I was a child. At that time my parents taught me in a park, and I picked it up after just a week.

Original sentence has redundant words and awkward placement of 'then' and 'just'. Remove the extra 'how to ride a bike' repetition and place modifiers correctly. Use 'picked it up after just a week' to mean you learned quickly. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same phrase and keep time expressions next to the verb they modify.

× Well, I would say properly yes. People in my country often ride bike for many purpose such as the transportation for them to go to market or when they need to go somewhere is near to them.

✓ Well, I would say probably yes. People in my country often ride bikes for many purposes, such as going to the market or when a destination is near.

Errors: 'properly' incorrect word choice -> use 'probably'. 'ride bike' missing plural -> 'ride bikes' (plural form). 'for many purpose' needs plural -> 'for many purposes'. 'the transportation for them to go to market' is wordy and uses incorrect articles; use 'going to the market' or simply 'going to the market'. 'when they need to go somewhere is near to them' is ungrammatical; use 'when a destination is near' or 'when the place is nearby'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements, choose correct adverb ('probably'), and simplify phrases for clarity.