Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct factual errors, and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers under five sentences and avoid filler sounds. Also use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., "fell off" instead of "got hard").

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood, but I once fell off and badly damaged the frame, so my mother sold it. Since then I haven’t owned another bike, although I sometimes borrow one when I visit friends.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "however") and avoid hesitations. Be more precise about who owns bikes (children, students, adults) and why (cost, convenience, traffic). Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many students and office workers use bicycles to avoid traffic and save money, and I noticed even adults in my neighborhood regularly cycle to the market.

× Yes I did have a bike when I was like 607 but I got hard while riding that bike so my mother sold it after and ever since I haven't owned a bike.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was about 6 or 7, but I fell hard while riding that bike, so my mother sold it afterwards, and ever since I haven't owned a bike.

Original sentence has multiple problems but most relevant to the allowed list is past tense usage and choice of verbs. '607' is a typo for '6 or 7' and 'got hard' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'fell hard' (past simple). 'Sold it after' is awkward; use 'sold it afterwards'. The clause 'ever since I haven't owned a bike' correctly uses the present perfect to describe a situation continuing to now. Suggestion: keep past simple for completed actions (did have, fell, sold) and use 'about 6 or 7' for approximate age.

× Yeah, I think so because, uh back in my days almost out of my friends owned a bike and also, and I haven't been in my home country for a long time, but uh, the last time I was there, I think even the adults own a bike because our car uh.

✓ Yeah, I think so because, back in my day almost all of my friends owned a bike, and I haven't been in my home country for a long time, but the last time I was there, I think even the adults owned bikes because our cars...

This sentence mixes tenses and has several grammar issues. Key problems per the list: present tense usage and subject-verb agreement. 'Back in my days' should be 'back in my day'. 'Almost out of my friends' should be 'almost all of my friends'. Since referring to the past, use past simple 'owned' rather than present 'own' when talking about the last time you were there. Also 'our car' should be plural 'our cars' if referring generally to why adults might still use bikes; adjust based on intended meaning. Suggestions: keep consistent tense (past simple) when describing past situations, correct idiomatic expressions ('back in my day'), and ensure noun number matches meaning ('almost all', 'cars' or 'a car').