Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, concise and relevant. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I did), correct factual mistakes ("when I was tired" seems wrong), and add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words if adding details. Keep it under five short sentences and avoid unnecessary words.

예시: Yes, I did. My father bought me a red bicycle from Amritsar when I turned seven, and I rode it every day around our neighborhood. It was a simple, sturdy bike that helped me go to friends' houses and to the park.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and one brief example. Avoid repetition and grammar errors; use linking words (for example, because, therefore) to make your answer coherent. Keep sentences short and precise and use more appropriate vocabulary (e.g., 'inexpensive' instead of 'less expensive', 'students' instead of 'children who want to go for a school').

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips. For example, many students and workers cycle to school or nearby markets to save time and money.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was tired because my father bought it from Amritsar city of Punjab on my 7th birthday.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because my father bought it in Amritsar, Punjab for my 7th birthday.

The original sentence uses 'when I was tired' which is incorrect contextually; the intended meaning is 'when I was a child'. Also 'bought it from Amritsar city of Punjab' is awkward and unidiomatic: use 'in Amritsar, Punjab'. Use 'for my 7th birthday' rather than 'on my 7th birthday' to indicate purpose of the gift. Keep past tense consistent: 'had' and 'bought' are correct. Suggestion: replace incorrect time phrase and fix prepositional phrases for clarity.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because whenever people want to go near nearby nearby area of their house, they mostly use by because it is less expensive as compared to other modes of transport.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because when people want to go to nearby areas, they mostly use bikes since they are less expensive than other modes of transport.

Several preposition and word-choice errors: 'go near nearby nearby area of their house' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'go to nearby areas'. 'use by' is incorrect; the correct verb phrase is 'use bikes'. 'Less expensive as compared to' is wordy and awkward; use 'less expensive than'. Also change 'it' to 'they' to agree with plural 'bikes'. Advice: remove redundancy, ensure prepositions ('to' for movement) are correct, and match pronouns to nouns.

× For example children who want to go for a school so they use bike.

✓ For example, children who want to go to school often use bikes.

Original sentence has several issues: 'go for a school' is incorrect preposition and article use; correct phrase is 'go to school'. 'so they use bike' is an incorrect connector and singular noun; use 'often use bikes' to express frequency and plural agreement. Also add a comma after 'For example' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('to school'), plural nouns with matching verbs, and appropriate adverbs to show frequency.