Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, use correct tense and vocabulary, and organise into 1–3 coherent sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, correct mistakes (sport bicycle → a sports bike; writing → riding; part of my house → park near my house). Add a brief specific detail and use a linking word if adding extra information.

예시: Yes, I had a sports bike when I was a child. It was a birthday gift from my parents, and I loved riding it around the small park near my house because it was a safe place to practise.

제안: Answer directly and avoid redundancy (In my opinion/I believe). Use clearer nouns (bikes or motorbikes) and correct phrasing (on the road). Provide one specific reason and a linking word to connect idea and evidence.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in Malaysia. For example, I often see many motorbikes on the roads during my daily commute, which shows that riding is a common and convenient mode of transport.

× Yeah, I do have a sport bicycle.

✓ Yes, I had a sports bicycle.

The question asks about the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?') so the student should use past tense. Using present tense 'do have' is incorrect for a past-time question. Also 'sport bicycle' is unidiomatic; 'sports bicycle' or 'sports bike' is common. Suggest using past simple 'had' and 'sports bicycle'.

× When I was a kid.

✓ When I was a kid,

This fragment lacks completion and should be attached to the previous or following sentence. It should be a dependent time clause and followed by a comma if leading into another clause. Combine with adjacent sentence or add content to complete it.

× It was gifted from my parents as a birthday gift and I really enjoyed writing it around the part of my house.

✓ It was a birthday gift from my parents, and I really enjoyed riding it around the park near my house.

Several issues: 'gifted from' is awkward; 'a birthday gift from my parents' is natural. 'writing' is incorrect form and word; intended verb is 'ride' so use 'riding'. 'part of my house' is incorrect preposition and noun; likely 'park near my house' or 'around my neighborhood' fits. This correction uses correct verb form (present participle 'riding') and clearer noun phrase.

× In my opinion, I believe that bikers are popular in my country which is Malaysia and that is because every time I'm driving to any road, I can see all the bikers riding around the road as a routine.

✓ In my opinion, biking is popular in my country, Malaysia, because whenever I drive on the road I can see many cyclists riding regularly.

Redundant phrasing 'In my opinion, I believe' should be simplified. 'Bikers are popular' is awkward; say 'biking is popular' or 'there are many bikers'. 'Which is Malaysia' is a misplaced clause; set off with commas. 'Every time I'm driving to any road' is unidiomatic; use 'whenever I drive on the road'. 'All the bikers' and 'around the road as a routine' are unnatural; use 'many cyclists riding regularly'. Also pronoun/subject clarity improved.