Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar, give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms. Use linking words (e.g., "but", "so", "after") correctly and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "pedals", "toy bike", "park").

예시: Yes, I had a small toy bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me and I rode it in the garden for a few months, but I stopped using it because I kept getting my feet caught in the pedals.

제안: Start with a clear direct opinion, then support with two specific reasons or examples. Improve grammar (plural/singular agreement) and avoid filler words like "uh". Use linking words such as "because", "however", or "on the other hand" to contrast points. Finish the sentence fully with a clear point about "luxurious bikes" if mentioning them.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many middle-class families use them for short commutes when they cannot afford a car. However, there is also a market for high-end motorcycles among wealthier people, which shows a contrast in bike types and usage.

× Yes, when I was a child I had a small toy bike that my parents have brought has brought me.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a small toy bike that my parents had brought me.

The sentence incorrectly mixes present perfect ('have brought') and an extra auxiliary ('has brought') with a past time reference ('when I was a child'). Use past perfect 'had brought' or simple past 'brought' to match the past context. Using 'had brought' emphasizes the action occurred before the period being discussed; 'brought' would also be acceptable: 'my parents brought me.' Avoid duplicating auxiliaries.

× I rode it for a little while in a garden, but I often got tangled in paddles and stopped using it after a few months.

✓ I rode it for a little while in the garden, but I often got tangled in the pedals and stopped using it after a few months.

Two issues: 'in a garden' is acceptable but context suggests a specific nearby garden, so 'the garden' is more natural (article issue, ID 22), and 'paddles' is the wrong word; the correct present participle noun is 'pedals' (parts of a bike). 'Tangled in pedals' uses the correct noun form. The core correction is noun choice rather than verb participle, but this line matches the intended riding action.

× Speaking honestly, bikes are usually popular in middle class family as they travel on their bikes when they have no car.

✓ To be honest, bikes are usually popular in middle-class families because they travel by bike when they do not have a car.

Several present-tense and noun-number issues: use the idiom 'To be honest' instead of 'Speaking honestly.' 'Middle class family' should be plural and hyphenated as 'middle-class families' (article/number and adjective formation). 'They travel on their bikes' is awkward; 'travel by bike' is the natural expression. Use 'do not have' instead of 'have no' for clarity. These changes keep present-tense reference consistent.

× Uh, thinking on opposite aspect, there are many luxurious bikes that.

✓ On the other hand, there are many luxurious bikes as well.

The original sentence is an incomplete clause and uses awkward phrasing ('thinking on opposite aspect'). Replace with the discourse marker 'On the other hand' and complete the clause with 'there are many luxurious bikes as well.' This fixes sentence structure and provides a complete, natural contrast.