Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more fluent, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and articles (e.g., “when I was a child”, “every afternoon”, “because I wanted to”). Avoid repetition like “Yes, I. Yes, I did”.

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike when I was a child, and I rode it almost every afternoon. I often cycled to my friends’ houses or around the neighborhood because it was fun and gave me some freedom.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and coherent linking words. Avoid filler words like “uh” and repeated phrases. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “rural areas”, “commuting”, “recreational”).

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular. Many people use mountain bikes for recreation and to explore rural or hilly areas, while others ride bicycles in cities for short commutes because they are cheap and healthy.

× Yes, I. Yes, I did have a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

Missing the article 'a' before 'child' and an extraneous fragment 'Yes, I.' The sentence should include the article to be grammatically correct: 'a child'. Also remove the duplicate 'Yes, I.' or merge into one complete reply. Suggestion: say 'Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.'

× I used it in every afternoon because I want to.

✓ I used it every afternoon because I wanted to.

Tense inconsistency: the main clause is past tense 'used' so the reason clause must also be past 'wanted'. Also 'in every afternoon' is incorrect preposition and article usage; use 'every afternoon' without 'in'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for both clauses: 'I used it every afternoon because I wanted to.'

× To go with my friends or visit in my in their house.

✓ I used it to go out with my friends or visit their house.

Fragment lacks subject and verb; word order and prepositions are incorrect ('visit in my in their house' is garbled). Combine with previous sentence or make a complete clause. Use 'to go out with my friends' and 'visit their house' (no 'in' before 'their house').

× I think many people use a bicycle like a mountain bike because they are adventurous or go in the in the upper places like uh province.

✓ I think many people use bicycles, such as mountain bikes, because they are adventurous or like to go to higher areas such as the provinces.

Several errors: 'use a bicycle' is unnatural when speaking generally — use the plural 'bicycles' (singular/plural issue). 'Like a mountain bike' should be 'such as mountain bikes' for examples. 'Go in the in the upper places' has extra 'in the' and wrong preposition; use 'go to higher areas'. 'Province' should be plural or specified; 'the provinces' is natural. Also add 'like to' before 'go' to express preference. Suggestion: say 'I think many people use bicycles, such as mountain bikes, because they are adventurous or like to go to higher areas such as the provinces.'