Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сократите запинки и используйте более чёткую структуру: начните с основной фразы, затем добавьте 1–2 уточняющих предложения с конкретными деталями (размер, цвет, кто подарил, почему вам понравилось). Избегайте лишних слов («so», повторяющиеся «uh») и следите за согласованием времен и предлогов.

예시: Yes, I had a bike as a child. It was a large red bicycle that my father gave me for my birthday, and I used to ride it every afternoon because it was comfortable and easy to control.

제안: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и сделайте ответ более точным: начните с общего мнения, затем приведите конкретную причину и пример. Используйте связки (for example, because, so) и согласование множественного числа («people work», «their homes»). Избегайте повторов и слов-паразитов.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For example, many people who work close to their homes cycle to work to avoid traffic and save money on taxis or petrol.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, so it was a big uh, with a, uh, red color and I really like it and it presented me by my father for my birthday.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was big and red, and I really liked it. It was given to me by my father for my birthday.

The student mixes past and present tenses and uses incorrect passive construction. Use past tense consistently for past events: 'liked' instead of 'like'. Describe the bike concisely: 'big and red' rather than 'with a red color'. Use correct passive: 'It was given to me by my father' not 'it presented me by my father'. Suggestions: keep verbs in past when talking about childhood, use natural adjective order, and use standard passive voice: 'was given to me'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Yes, it's very popular.

✓ Yes, they are very popular.

The student uses singular 'it' to refer to 'bikes', a plural noun. Use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are'. Maintain present simple for general facts. Suggestion: match pronoun and verb to the noun number: 'bikes' -> 'they are'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× And the people who works not far from his home, not far from their home, they go to work by by their bike in order to go to the taxi or in order to go by car.

✓ People who work not far from their homes often go to work by bike instead of taking a taxi or driving a car.

Errors: 'who works' should be 'who work' to agree with plural 'people'; 'his home' conflicts with plural, use 'their homes'; 'by by their bike' is redundant and singular; unnatural phrase 'in order to go to the taxi or in order to go by car'. Use plural 'bike' expression 'by bike' and concise alternatives: 'instead of taking a taxi or driving a car'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, use consistent plural possessives, avoid redundancy, and use idiomatic expressions: 'go by bike', 'take a taxi', 'drive a car'. Grammar problem type ID: 27