Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Content is relevant but language accuracy and coherence need improvement. Improve grammar (past tense and subject-verb agreement), use a clear topic sentence, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words like "and" or "which" to connect ideas. Keep the answer within 3–4 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My younger brother and I used to ride our different bicycles to school every day, and those rides created many happy memories. I especially remember racing each other on the way home, which made our journey fun.

제안: Answer is clear but sentences are long, repetitive and grammatically incorrect. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, "because" and "for instance"). Avoid vague words like "everybody" and correct verb forms and plurals.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For instance, many people ride bikes to markets or parks, and groups of friends often cycle together in the evenings for exercise and socialising.

× Me and my younger brother go up with our different bicycles on the schools.

✓ My younger brother and I rode our different bicycles to school.

The sentence uses the object pronoun order incorrectly and an incorrect subject pronoun form ('Me' should be 'My younger brother and I'). 'Go up with' is not a natural verb phrase for attending school; 'rode' fits the past tense context. 'On the schools' is incorrect preposition and number; use 'to school'. The corrected sentence fixes pronoun order and form, verb tense, and preposition. Suggestion: always use 'I' as a subject (place it after other people) and choose verbs and prepositions that match the context. Grammar problem type ID:12

× It creates a great memory during our journey but from school to home.

✓ It created great memories during our journey home from school.

The context is past ('had a bike during my childhood'), so present tense 'creates' is inconsistent; use past tense 'created'. 'A great memory' is better as plural 'great memories' to match the general statement. Word order 'during our journey but from school to home' is awkward; 'during our journey home from school' is natural. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with surrounding sentences and choose natural noun number and word order. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Well, I think yes, bikes are really popular in my country because everybody would choose bikes whether go to a short distance or sometimes they have to go on cycling during their Evening Times with their friends for creating a joyful memories with them also.

✓ Well, I think so; bikes are really popular in my country because people choose them for short trips, and sometimes they cycle in the evenings with friends to create joyful memories.

'I think yes' is unnatural; 'I think so' is idiomatic. Using 'everybody would choose' misuses the modal 'would' here; simple present 'choose' expresses habitual action. 'Whether go to a short distance' is incorrect structure; use 'for short trips'. 'Have to go on cycling' is awkward; 'sometimes they cycle' is natural. 'Evening Times' should be 'evenings' (lowercase and plural). 'for creating a joyful memories with them also' has article and plurality errors ('a joyful memories' wrong) and unnecessary 'also'; use 'to create joyful memories'. Suggestions: use simple present for habitual facts, avoid unnecessary modals, fix noun number and article usage, and simplify phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:4