Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar, avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct articles, remove duplicate words, and fix awkward phrases like "play and run with the bike world".

예시: Yes, I did. I had a red bike that I rode almost every day in my neighborhood. For example, my cousins and I would build small obstacle courses and race each other after school, which helped me improve my balance and confidence.

제안: Answer directly, then give one clear, specific reason or example. Remove filler words like "uh" and fix fragmented sentences (e.g., "Store."). Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas and provide concrete details about who uses bikes and why.

예시: Yes, they are very popular. For example, in my hometown almost every child owns a bike, and they often ride together after school to play games or race, because biking is an affordable and healthy way to have fun.

× I played the with that bike in the neighborhood almost all every day.

✓ I played with that bike in the neighborhood almost every day.

Extra definite article 'the' before 'with' is incorrect and the phrase 'all every day' is redundant; use 'every day' to indicate frequency. Remove 'the' and 'all' to make the sentence grammatical and natural.

× I used to play and run with the the bike world and make courses with my friends and cousins.

✓ I used to ride the bike around the neighborhood and make courses with my friends and cousins.

The original sentence has several problems: repeated article 'the the', incorrect noun 'world' likely intended to be 'around' or 'around the neighborhood', and incorrect verb 'run with' for using a bike. Rephrase to 'ride the bike around the neighborhood' and 'make courses' is acceptable but 'make courses with my friends and cousins' is kept; this corrects word choice and word order.

× Uh, for example, in the neighborhood where I grew up, every child has his own bike.

✓ For example, in the neighborhood where I grew up, every child had their own bike.

The question asks about whether bikes are popular in the country (general/past context referencing where the speaker grew up). The student used present tense 'has' which conflicts with 'where I grew up' (past). Also 'his' is gender-specific; use 'their' for gender-neutral singular. Change 'has' to past 'had' and 'his' to 'their' to match tense and inclusivity.

× Store.

✓ They would often store them or race with those bikes and play quite often.

'Store.' is a sentence fragment lacking context and a verb; it's unclear. I expanded it into a full clause consistent with the rest of the reply: 'They would often store them or race with those bikes and play quite often.' This supplies a subject and verb and connects to the following sentence about racing and playing. If the student's intent was different, replace with a complete clause explaining what people did with the bikes.

× Race with those bikes and play quite often.

✓ They raced with those bikes and played quite often.

As a continuation of a past-time description ('where I grew up'), the verbs should be in past tense to match 'grew up' and 'had.' Using base form 'Race' and 'play' is incorrect as sentence fragments; use past tense 'raced' and 'played' to maintain consistent past narration.