Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on grammatical accuracy, clarity, and conciseness. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I had a bike as a child.”), avoid repetition and fillers, correct verb forms, and organize supporting details briefly (why you needed it and how you felt). Use linking words such as because and so to make the answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. Because my parents were often busy and the school was too far to walk, I used the bike to get to school every day. As a result, it was not only my main means of transport but also something I really enjoyed, since I felt independent and free.

제안: Answer directly and avoid irrelevant or confusing details. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.”), then give specific reasons and a brief example. Use correct vocabulary (motorbike vs bicycle) and correct grammar (e.g. children’s lives). Limit to 2–3 sentences and employ linking words like because and for example.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in Vietnam. Because many families find them cheap and convenient for short trips, children and adults often use bicycles or motorbikes to travel to school and work. For example, I used to see groups of students riding to school every morning.

× I did had a car whenever I tried because my car was a little bit far from the school and my parents were busy with their work.

✓ I had a car whenever I tried because my car was a little bit far from the school and my parents were busy with their work.

Use simple past for possession; 'did had' is incorrect because auxiliary 'did' requires base verb 'have' (did have) or drop auxiliary and use past 'had'. Suggestion: say 'I had' or 'I did have' if emphasizing.

× So no one, no one would take me to the school.

✓ So no one would take me to school.

Unnecessary repetition and article usage: 'the school' is unnatural when referring to attending school in general; 'to school' is idiomatic. Remove duplicate 'no one'.

× So I, I must go like umm, I must go to school myself like a bike.

✓ So I had to go to school by myself, using a bike.

Use past modal 'had to' for obligation in the past instead of 'must'. Also restructure for clarity: 'go to school by myself' and 'using a bike' describes means.

× So I buy not only a transportation for me to go to school, but like literally become my best friend and during my childhood.

✓ So I bought not only a means of transportation to go to school, but it literally became my best friend during my childhood.

Tense inconsistency and incorrect verb forms: 'buy' should be past 'bought'; 'transportation for me' is awkward—use 'a means of transportation' or 'transport'; 'become' should be past 'became' to match past timeframe; include subject 'it'.

× Yes, of course, because I was born in midnight umm, so most of the children in midnight they go whether when they they go to school by their motorbike.

✓ Yes, of course. I was born at midnight, and many children there go to school by bike.

Multiple issues: preposition for time is 'at midnight' not 'in midnight'; tense and wording are awkward—use simple present 'go to school' to describe habitual action; remove redundant words 'they they' and 'whether when'; 'motorbike' can be 'bike' for simplicity; 'most of the children in midnight' is unclear—replace with 'many children there'.

× Umm has become an A very necessary and important part of every children life in Vietnam.

✓ It has become a very necessary and important part of every child's life in Vietnam.

Article and noun form errors: 'an A' is duplicated; use 'a' before consonant sound; 'every children life' is incorrect—use singular possessive 'every child's life'. Begin sentence with a clear subject 'It'.