Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Correct the tense and simplify the opening. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details. Use past tense for childhood and avoid unnecessary greetings. For example, say when you had it, how often you used it, and one memory or reason why it was special. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words like “and” or “so” if adding details.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day to visit friends and go to the park, and it was my main way of getting around. I remember fixing a flat tyre with my father, which made me feel proud.

제안: Make the sentence more natural and use plural and articles correctly. Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific supporting details (who uses them, why, and where). Use linking words such as “because” or “for example” to connect ideas. Be concise and avoid filler words like “uh.”

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many children ride to school and adults use bikes for short commutes in cities, especially where traffic is bad.

× Hello, yes I do have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Hello, yes I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense ('do have') with a past time expression ('when I was a child'). Use the past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past simple for completed past states or possessions (I had a bike).

× Yes, many people, especially the kids in our country, use, uh, bike every day.

✓ Yes, many people, especially kids in our country, use bikes every day.

The noun 'bike' should be plural ('bikes') to agree with the plural subject 'many people' and the verb 'use'. Also 'the kids' is acceptable but 'kids' is more natural here. Suggestion: make countable nouns plural when referring to more than one (use bikes).