Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two brief specific details. Fix tense and phrasing (use past simple consistently) and avoid filler words. For example, say why you didn’t have a bike and, if relevant, mention how you felt or what you did instead.

예시: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one. Instead, I usually walked to school or took public transport, which made me independent but sometimes slow.

제안: Make the response complete and more specific. Start with a clear opinion, then give 1–2 concrete reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and avoid unfinished sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because fuel prices are high and many people want cheaper, healthier transport. For example, commuters often use bicycles for short trips in cities, and cycling clubs have become more common recently.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because we don't have enough money before, but yeah.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because we didn't have enough money then.

The sentence mixes past tense ('didn't have') with present tense ('don't have') and uses 'before' awkwardly. Use consistent past tense for a past time period: 'didn't have' and 'then' or 'back then'. Suggestion: replace 'don't have' with 'didn't have' and 'before' with 'then' or 'back then' to match the time frame and improve clarity.

× Yes, I can say that bikes are popular in my country, especially in today's era where gasoline's are high and people opt to use bicycles or they will just.

✓ Yes, I can say that bikes are popular in my country, especially nowadays when gasoline prices are high and people choose to ride bicycles or use other transport.

The phrase 'today's era' is awkward; 'nowadays' or 'today' is better. 'gasoline's are high' incorrectly uses a possessive and plural; the correct phrase is 'gasoline prices are high'. The clause 'or they will just' is incomplete; provide a complete alternative such as 'or use other transport.' Suggestions: use 'nowadays when' for time reference, 'gasoline prices' for cost, and complete the final clause for clarity.