Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and avoid repetition. Use linking words to show cause and result (e.g., "because", "so"). Also correct small grammar issues (use singular/plural correctly and avoid filler words).

예시: Yes. My father bought me a bike when I did very well at school because he had promised a reward for good grades. As a result, I got a two-wheeled bicycle that I used to ride around the neighborhood every weekend.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer, then add one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., "because", "however"). Avoid vague phrases and incomplete sentences; be careful with gender descriptions to keep them neutral and accurate. Limit to maximum five sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. For example, many men ride motorcycles or bicycles to work, and recently more women have taken up cycling as well. However, in some areas biking is still less common due to traffic and limited bike lanes.

× Yeah, my my father bought me bikes when I was a child and when I aced my class and he promised me to buy so he bought me. Bikes for two.

✓ Yeah, my father bought me a bike when I was a child. When I aced my class he promised to buy me one, and he did. The bike was for two.

This sentence has multiple issues; primary grammar problem is subject-verb agreement and article/number usage (IDs 27 and 1/22). 'Bikes' should be 'a bike' when referring to a single item; use singular with the indefinite article for one bike. The run-on sentence should be split into clear clauses and redundant words removed ('my my'). Use 'promised to buy me one' rather than 'promised me to buy' for correct verb pattern. Also 'Bikes for two.' is a fragment; rewrite as 'The bike was for two.' Suggestions: remove duplicate word, use singular nouns with articles when appropriate, split into shorter sentences, and use correct verb patterns after 'promise'.

× Yeah, it's pretty popular in our country as adults, male adults, I ride bikes.

✓ Yeah, biking is pretty popular in our country among adults, especially men; I ride a bike.

The original has pronoun and phrasing issues (ID 12) and sentence structure problems (ID 26). 'It's' is vague; replace with 'biking' to name the activity. 'As adults, male adults' is awkward and inconsistent; use 'among adults, especially men'. Use 'a bike' for the activity of riding and ensure article use. Also combine into a single coherent sentence.

× And now that girls have started riding bikes, it's rare, but it looks so good on them and.

✓ Now that women and girls have started riding bikes, it was once rare but has become more common, and it looks good on them.

This is primarily a sentence structure error (ID 26) and also awkward word choice. The clause 'it's rare' conflicts with 'now that' implying change; clarify temporal contrast: 'it was once rare but has become more common.' Avoid trailing conjunctions like 'and.' Replace 'girls' with 'women and girls' if intended, and use consistent tense. Suggestions: state the contrast clearly and finish the sentence without dangling conjunctions.