Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (simple past: “I had a bike”). Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, "and" or "so") and avoid filler sounds like “uh.” Correct tense, articles and plural forms (e.g., “a bike,” “many photos”). Aim for 2–4 sentences, each clear and relevant to the question.

예시: I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink with a flower pattern, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood. I also have many old photos of me on that bike, so it brings back a lot of happy memories.

제안: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words like “because,” “so,” or “however.” Use correct verb forms and articles (e.g., "they use cars and buses"). Be specific about which aspects (weather, infrastructure, culture, safety) affect popularity. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Not very popular. People in my country usually use cars and buses because the weather can be hot and rainy, and there are few bike lanes, so cycling is less convenient and less safe.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child uh, it was pink with the a flower uh.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; it was pink with a flower.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past timeframe 'when I was a child.' Use past tense 'had.' Also 'a child' needs the article 'a' before 'child' and 'the a flower' is incorrect—use 'a flower.' Combine into two clauses for clarity.

× It was really like uh have uh like have a relation with my memory.

✓ It was really connected to my memories.

The original uses awkward repeated verbs 'have like have' and incorrect noun phrase 'relation with my memory.' Replace with a simple past passive/active structure 'was connected to' and plural 'memories' to match typical English usage.

× Uh also I have many of uh.

✓ I also have many of them.

The phrase 'many of' is incomplete without an object. Add 'them' to indicate the photos or items mentioned previously. Use past tense 'had' if referring to the past: 'I also had many of them.' Choose tense to match context.

× I have much of photo when I was right back and and I.

✓ I have many photos from when I was younger.

Countable noun 'photo' requires 'many' not 'much.' 'When I was right back' is ungrammatical; use 'when I was younger' or 'from my childhood.' Also complete the sentence; remove trailing conjunctions.

× Not much because they are use more car on the bus because I think they don't use much bicycle because the weather it is not helpful or not much encourage or promote them to use the bike.

✓ Not much, because people use cars and buses more. I think they don't use bicycles much because the weather is not favorable and there is little encouragement to cycle.

Multiple issues: 'they are use' should be 'people use' (subject-verb agreement and word choice). 'Car' and 'bus' should be plural or preceded by articles; better to say 'cars and buses.' 'Much bicycle' is wrong—use 'bicycles' or 'bicycle' with 'much' replaced by 'much' after 'use' as adverb: 'use bicycles much' -> 'don't use bicycles much.' 'The weather it is not helpful' is ungrammatical; use 'the weather is not favorable.' 'Not much encourage or promote them' should be 'there is little encouragement to' or 'they are not encouraged to.'