Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Старайтесь отвечать прямо и структурированно: начните с чёткой темы (да/нет), затем дайте 1–2 поддерживающих предложения с конкретными деталями и используте связки. Избегайте заполнителей («uh», «to be honest») и незавершённых фраз. Также ограничьте ответ до не более 4–5 предложений и завершайте мысль полностью.

예시: Yes, I did. My dad bought me a small red bike when I was six, and at first I found it terrifying because I couldn’t control the direction. After practising for several days with his help, I learned to balance and ride confidently around the neighborhood.

제안: Отвечайте ясно и аргументированно: начните с прямого утверждения (например, «Да, велосипеды популярны» или «Не очень»), затем приведите 1–2 конкретные причины или примера. Избегайте частых пауз и повторов, используйте связки (for example, because, therefore) и конкретные факты вместо расплывчатых фраз о «сравнении» без объяснения.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many children receive bikes as gifts, and parents often encourage cycling because it is cheap and healthy. As a result, you can often see groups of kids riding around parks and streets after school.

× To be honest, I like biking because when I was a little kid my dad bought me a bike and it was so terrifying for my younger self due to the fact that it's really difficult to control your directions.

✓ To be honest, I liked biking because when I was a little kid my dad bought me a bike and it was very terrifying for my younger self because it was really difficult to control the direction.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' and present contraction 'it's' with past events ('was a little kid', 'bought me a bike'). Use past tense for consistency: 'liked' and 'was' instead of 'like' and 'it's'. Also change 'directions' to singular 'direction' and 'so terrifying' to 'very terrifying' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: keep all verbs describing past events in past tense and use consistent noun forms.

× And after spending days and days practicing riding a bike, I finally, uh.

✓ After spending days practicing riding the bike, I finally learned to ride it.

The original is a sentence fragment ending with 'I finally, uh.' which lacks a main verb or object. This is a sentence structure error. Complete the idea by adding the result 'learned to ride it' and use 'the bike' or 'it' for clarity. Also remove filler repetition 'days and days' for conciseness.

× Uh, I could not be that every kid in my country, uh, had or has a bike because, uh, in my country, it feels like not having a bike is kinda, uh, not normal, abnormal because uh, every kid when, uh, they, when they're young, uh, compares, compares own self with other.

✓ I cannot say that every kid in my country had or has a bike because in my country not having a bike seems abnormal since every kid, when they are young, compares themselves with others.

Multiple errors: 'could not be that' is ungrammatical; use 'cannot say that' or 'I cannot say that'. 'Feels like not having a bike is kinda not normal, abnormal' is redundant and awkward; use 'seems abnormal'. Subject-verb agreement and pronoun forms: 'every kid... compares own self with other' uses incorrect reflexive and pluralization; use 'compares themselves with others'. Also streamline tense choice: 'had or has' acceptable but 'had or has a bike' rewritten to 'had or has a bike' could be simplified; here we use 'had or has' as given but corrected surrounding structure. Suggestion: avoid fillers ('uh', 'kinda') and ensure pronouns agree with indefinite subjects by using 'they/themselves'.