Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question directly (e.g. “No, I didn’t own a bike as a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g. “However, I learned to ride at school, which was memorable because…”). Avoid confusing or redundant phrases and correct basic grammar (tense, articles, prepositions).

예시: No, I didn’t own a bike when I was a child. However, I learned to ride a bicycle at school, which was a memorable experience because my teacher helped me overcome my fear of falling. As a result, I felt more confident outdoors and often practised riding with friends.

제안: Answer directly and give clear reasons with linking words. Begin with a topic sentence (e.g. “No, bikes are not very popular.”), then use specific reasons and compare alternatives (public transport, cars). Improve grammar and word choice (use ‘in my country’, ‘people mainly travel by public transport or drive their own cars’).

예시: No, bikes are not very popular in my country. Mainly, people prefer public transport or private cars because our cities are busy and distances can be long, so cycling is less practical. For instance, many suburbs lack safe bike lanes, which discourages people from using bicycles for daily travel.

× When I was small, I didn't have a bicycle in your house, but I have learned how to ride a bike school when I was small and that's a great experience for me to learn the bicycle skills.

✓ When I was small, I didn't have a bicycle at home, but I learned how to ride a bike at school when I was young, and that was a great experience for learning bicycle skills.

Pronoun and reference errors: 'your house' is incorrect because the student should refer to their own home; use 'home' or 'my house' (Incorrect use of pronouns). Tense consistency: 'have learned' is present perfect but the context is past, so use simple past 'learned' (Past tense issue, ID 5). Missing prepositions: 'ride a bike school' needs 'at school' (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). Redundancy and article use: 'learn the bicycle skills' is awkward; use 'learning bicycle skills' or 'learning to ride'. Suggested improvements: use consistent past tense when talking about childhood, replace 'your house' with 'home' or 'my house', include correct prepositions like 'at school', and simplify phrases to avoid redundancy.

× In some even I don't have any bike.

✓ Sometimes I didn't have a bike.

Awkward word order and incorrect adverb choice: 'In some even' is not a correct phrase; it seems to aim for 'sometimes' (Sentence structure errors, ID 26). Tense consistency: because the rest of the statement refers to childhood, use past tense 'didn't have' (Past tense issue, ID 5). Use concise, standard adverb placement: put 'sometimes' at the start and follow with subject and verb.

× No, because when you in our country and people travel everywhere or visit everywhere by the public transportation and mainly the people drive their car by themselves.

✓ No. In our country, people usually travel everywhere by public transportation, and many people also drive their own cars.

Pronoun misuse and sentence fragments: 'when you in our country' is incorrect and creates a fragment; use 'In our country' to state general facts (Incorrect use of pronouns, ID 12; Sentence structure errors, ID 26). Article and preposition issues: 'by the public transportation' should be 'by public transportation' (Incorrect use of prepositions/articles, IDs 11 and 22). Word choice and redundancy: 'mainly the people drive their car by themselves' is awkward; 'many people drive their own cars' is clear and idiomatic. Ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent simple present for general truths (Present tense issue, ID 6).