Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce fillers and organize your reply into a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Use one or two linking words if needed. Also use slightly wider vocabulary (e.g., "gift" instead of "present of my father") and correct word order: "It was a red bike that my father gave me." Keep answer to 1–3 sentences for clarity.

예시: Yes, I did. It was a red bike that my father gave me as a gift. I remember riding it around the park near our house every weekend.

제안: Clarify your main idea and avoid repetition and fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Use correct vocabulary and grammar: say "many people cannot afford cars" rather than repeating phrases. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular. This is mainly because many people cannot afford cars, so they use bikes for daily travel. For example, students and market vendors often cycle to work or school.

× Yes, I did. Uh, I had the bike, uh, when I was a child, uh, the bike was red and uh, was a present of my father.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child; it was red and was a present from my father.

Multiple issues: redundant 'the' before 'bike' (article error/clarity) and awkward phrasing 'present of my father' (incorrect preposition). The main listed type matched is Past tense issue because the sentence uses past narrative; ensure past simple verbs are consistent. Correction uses past simple consistently ('had', 'was') and correct preposition 'from'. Suggestion: omit filler words and unnecessary articles, use 'a bike' for non-specific mention, and use 'present from' to indicate giver.

× Yes, I do uh, I think that, uh, the bikes are popular because, uh, there isn't a possibility of there isn't a possibility to buy uh, car and and the people uh, have used them besides bicycle. OK use.

✓ Yes, I do. I think bicycles are popular because many people cannot afford to buy a car, so they use bicycles instead.

Main issues: incorrect quantifier and awkward repetition 'there isn't a possibility of there isn't a possibility', incorrect article 'buy uh, car' (article errors), and wrong phrase 'have used them besides bicycle' (preposition and noun form). The selected type is Incorrect use of quantifiers because 'there isn't a possibility' is a poor expression for inability/insufficient means; better is 'cannot afford' or 'cannot' with quantifier like 'many people'. Correction simplifies and uses correct quantifiers ('many people'), correct article usage, plural 'bicycles', and proper conjunction 'so' with 'instead'. Suggestion: use concise expressions for ability/affordability, use plural nouns when speaking generally ('bicycles', 'people'), and avoid repetition.