Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it has hesitation sounds, a small grammatical issue, and one unclear phrase (“try other children riding”). To improve, remove filler words, correct the awkward phrase, and add one concise supporting detail using a linking word. Also keep it within 3–4 sentences for naturalness. For example, start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific reason and a brief result.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike until I was eleven. Because of that, I often felt jealous when I watched other children riding around the neighborhood, since I wanted the freedom to explore. As a result, I spent more time playing ball games with friends near my home until I finally got a bike.

제안: This answer is short, hesitant, and contains unclear phrasing (“yes else”, “by us quite accessible”). To improve, give a clear topic sentence, add one or two specific supporting details (reasons or examples), and use linking words for coherence. Reduce filler words and use correct phrases like “in my country” and “widely accessible.”

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. They are widely accessible and affordable, so many families buy them for children and commuters. In addition, many cities have bike lanes and rental services, which encourages more people to cycle.

× Umm, well, no. I didn't have a bike until I was 11. I remember feeling quite jealous whenever I saw others try other children riding around the neighborhood because I wanted the freedom to explore and play with my friends.

✓ Umm, well, no. I didn't have a bike until I was 11. I remember feeling quite jealous whenever I saw other children riding around the neighborhood because I wanted the freedom to explore and play with my friends.

grammar_problem_type_id:26, grammar_problem_type:Sentence structure errors. The original sentence contains the phrase 'saw others try other children riding', which is ungrammatical and likely a mistaken insertion of the word 'try'. The corrected sentence removes the extraneous word 'try' and uses 'saw other children riding', which is the correct structure: 'saw' (past verb) + object 'other children' + present participle 'riding'. Suggestion: when describing observing an action, use 'see/saw' + object + -ing form, and avoid inserting unrelated words.

× Well, I would say yes else. So, uh, by us quite accessible for every, uh, family, uh, no matter what, no matter how wealthy they are, umm.

✓ Well, I would say yes. Bikes are quite accessible for every family where I live, no matter how wealthy they are.

grammar_problem_type_id:26, grammar_problem_type:Sentence structure errors. The original answer contains fragments and unclear phrasing: 'yes else' is incorrect, and 'by us quite accessible for every family' is ungrammatical. The correction produces a full, coherent sentence appropriate to the question: 'I would say yes. Bikes are quite accessible for every family where I live, no matter how wealthy they are.' Suggestions: use complete sentences, place the subject before the verb (Bikes are...), and replace colloquial fragments ('by us') with clearer phrases ('where I live').