Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Focus on grammar, fluency and concise structure. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I did.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm, uh), correct verb forms (was/were) and awkward phrases. Aim for 2–4 sentences and include a specific example (where you rode, how often, who with).

예시: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike that I rode almost every day to visit my grandmother, which was about a 10-minute ride from my home. Riding with my friends made it more fun, and it helped me learn balance and confidence.

제안: Give a clear direct opinion first and support it with specific reasons and a linking word (e.g. “because” or “however”). Remove hesitations and improve sentence structure (use present simple: 'people in my country use'). Provide one or two concrete facts or comparisons to make your answer convincing.

예시: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer using public transport and the metro for convenience and speed. For example, commuting by metro is faster for long distances, so many commuters choose it over cycling.

× Yes umm, uh, when I were a child I had a bike and uh, I used to uh go to the, my granny and other ways uh, and it was enjoyable for me and umm, even.

✓ Yes, umm, when I was a child I had a bike, and I used to go to my granny's house and other places, and it was enjoyable for me.

Original sentence uses 'were' with subject 'I' which is incorrect: the correct past tense form for the verb 'to be' with singular subject 'I' is 'was' (Grammar problem type ID 27: subject-verb agreement errors). Also 'go to the, my granny' is ungrammatical; use 'go to my granny's house' or 'visit my granny' and replace 'other ways' with 'other places' to convey intended meaning. Remove filler sounds and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: practice subject-verb agreement in past simple (I was, you were, he/she was) and use possessive 'granny's' when referring to her house.

× As more As for me, uh, riding a bike is not popular uh, because umm, all of the people in my country uh, used umm uh, public transport and metro.

✓ As for me, riding a bike is not popular, because most people in my country use public transport and the metro.

Original sentence has multiple issues: 'As more As for me' is incorrect phrasing; use 'As for me'. The verb 'used' is past tense but the sentence asks about general truth (present), so present simple 'use' is correct (Grammar problem type ID 6: present tense issue). Also 'all of the people' is exaggerated and awkward; 'most people' is more natural (quantifier choice but we only correct items from the provided list). Finally, include the definite article 'the' before 'metro' if referring to the system (Grammar problem type ID 17: incorrect use of the definite article). Suggestion: use present simple for habitual facts, 'use' not 'used', and simplify phrasing to 'As for me, ...'.