Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by using a stronger topic sentence, varying sentence structure, and adding one specific detail or short anecdote. Keep under five sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., “so” or “which helped”).

예시: Yes — I had a small pink bike with training wheels when I was about six. Because it had four wheels at first, it felt very stable, so I gained confidence quickly and started riding without help within a few weeks.

제안: Your reply gives useful information but needs clearer structure, improved grammar, and more precise vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (e.g., “for example,” “also”) and correct phrases (e.g., “in my country,” “bike industry is well developed”). Avoid repetition and keep to a maximum of five sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many commuters cycle to the subway or ride straight to work or university, and because the bike industry is well developed, you can find good, affordable models everywhere.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I remember that it was pink coloured and it had four wheels. It helped me learn how to ride the bicycle.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I remember that it was pink and had four wheels. It helped me learn how to ride a bicycle.

Redundant past tense forms are not incorrect but wording can be improved: 'pink coloured' is unidiomatic in modern English; use 'pink'. 'the bicycle' is unnecessarily specific; use 'a bicycle' for general reference. Keep past tense 'had' and 'helped' because the actions occurred in the past.

× Yes, many people ride bikes to go to the subway from home and they go to work by bike or go to study in in our country bikes industry is very mature.

✓ Yes, many people ride bikes to the subway from home; they go to work or to school by bike, and in our country the bicycle industry is very mature.

The original sentence is a run-on with missing connectors and has word order issues. Fixes: use 'to the subway' instead of 'to go to the subway', or 'ride bikes to the subway from home'. Use parallel structure 'go to work or to school by bike'. Remove duplicate 'in'. Add a conjunction and article before 'bicycle industry' and change 'bikes industry' to 'bicycle industry' for correct noun form. These changes create clear clauses and proper sentence flow.