Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a concise topic sentence answering the question (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.”). Avoid irrelevant details (your gender and current age) and correct tense errors (“were” → “was”). If you want to add a brief reason, use one supporting sentence linked with a simple connector (e.g., “because” or “so”). Keep total length under five sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn’t afford one. However, I sometimes borrowed my neighbor’s bike to ride around the park.

제안: Organize your answer: give a clear main idea, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Reduce hesitation words (uh) and avoid repetitive phrases. Use correct collocations (e.g., “more commonly used” not “more used to by”). Provide one or two specific examples or a short comparison to make the point concrete.

예시: Yes, bikes are fairly popular, but cars are more commonly used for long journeys. For example, many people use bikes for short trips or commuting in crowded cities because they are cheaper and easier to park.

× No, actually I'm a girl and currently I'm 18 years old and I don't have a bike when I were a child.

✓ No, actually I'm a girl and currently I'm 18 years old and I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence mixes present tense 'don't have' with a past-time clause 'when I were a child' and uses the wrong past form 'were' for first person singular. This is a tense and pronoun/verb form issue: use past tense for a past situation ('didn't have') and the correct singular past of 'to be' for I ('was'). Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for past time references and use 'I was' instead of 'I were'.

× Of course, in my country, bikes are popular, uh, but I think uh, the cars are more used to by the people in our country, but bikes are also there, uh, when the people can't uh, afford cars, they both bike for their needs.

✓ Of course, in my country bikes are popular, but I think cars are used more by people in our country. Bikes are also common; when people can't afford cars, they use bikes for their needs.

Several issues: awkward word order 'the cars are more used to by the people' is incorrect; 'are used more by people' is proper present passive/active phrasing. 'They both bike' is not idiomatic — use 'they use bikes'. Also unnecessary articles ('the cars') and fillers removed. Suggestion: simplify to logical subject-verb order and use 'use bikes' rather than 'bike' as a verb in this context; maintain present tense for general statements about popularity.