Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is correct but too short. Give a brief topic sentence and one or two supporting details (reason or brief context) using linking words to make it natural and informative. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, my parents usually drove me to school because we lived far away, and public transport was more convenient. However, I sometimes borrowed a friend’s bike to ride in the park on weekends.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but is unclear and has grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons and use linking words (e.g., however, because, therefore). Make sentences concise and correct word order. Avoid vague phrases like 'the IT depends upon the city.'

예시: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country, especially among students and in smaller towns because they are inexpensive and easy to park. However, in larger cities more people prefer cars due to longer commutes and the need for comfort, so bike use is lower there.

× Yeah they are popular to an extent, but as the age increases and the IT depends upon the city, the many people prefer four Wheeler cars.

✓ Yeah, they are popular to an extent, but as people get older and depending on the city and its IT industry, many people prefer four-wheeler cars.

Errors include incorrect preposition use ('as the age increases' -> 'as people get older' or 'with age'; 'the IT depends upon the city' is awkward; use 'depending on the city and its IT industry'). Also remove the definite article 'the' before 'many people' and hyphenate 'four-wheeler'. Suggestions: use natural prepositional phrases ('as', 'depending on') and avoid unnecessary articles; keep subject consistent (people) and match verbs accordingly.