Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve accuracy, clarity and fluency. Use a clear topic sentence, correct word choice and verb forms, avoid repetition, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail and link ideas with a simple connector. For example, replace incorrect phrases like “child seized” with “child-sized” and correct verbs (“gave” not “give”).

예시: Yes, I had a small child-sized bicycle when I was young. I often rode it around my neighborhood with friends after school because it felt very freeing, and it let us explore nearby parks. We sometimes raced each other down the hill, which was great fun.

제안: Improve coherence, grammar and vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “also”). Correct sentence fragments and awkward phrasing (e.g. “keep balance with your bodies” → “keep you fit” or “help with balance”). Avoid isolated short fragments like “So many people.”

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. I think many people ride them because cycling is an affordable and convenient way to travel, and it also helps keep you fit. For example, commuters often use bikes to avoid traffic during rush hour.

× Yes, I had a small child seized bicycle when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a small children's bicycle when I was a child.

The original uses 'child seized' which is incorrect word order and choice. The intended meaning is a bicycle for children, which is expressed as 'children's bicycle' (a possessive noun used as an adjective). Use an apostrophe-s to indicate the bicycle designed for children. Also 'small children's bicycle' keeps correct adjective order ('small' describing size, 'children's' describing type).

× I spent hours reading around my neighborhood with friends after school because it felt freeing and give us a chance to explore nearby parks.

✓ I spent hours riding around my neighborhood with friends after school because it felt freeing and gave us a chance to explore nearby parks.

Two errors: 'reading' is the wrong verb; context implies 'riding' (verb choice). Also 'give' is present tense while the main clause is past ('spent', 'felt'); the correct past form is 'gave' to maintain consistent past tense. Keep verbs consistent in tense and use the appropriate verb for the activity described.

× Yes, because I think riding bikes is a great way to go anyplace and it can keep balance with your bodies.

✓ Yes, I think riding bikes is a great way to get around, and it helps you keep your balance.

Original has awkward phrase 'go anyplace' and 'keep balance with your bodies'. 'Get around' is a natural collocation for traveling locally. Use 'helps you keep your balance' for clarity and correct pronoun usage; 'your bodies' is unnatural in this context—singular 'you' is fine. Also replace 'it can' with 'it helps' to match meaning.

× So many people. Pre prefer to ride bikes.

✓ So many people prefer to ride bikes.

The original is fragmented: 'So many people.' is a sentence fragment without a verb. 'Pre' appears to be a typo. Merge into one complete sentence 'So many people prefer to ride bikes.' which includes subject and verb. Remove the stray fragment and fix the typo 'Pre' to 'prefer'.