Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and use correct tense. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler phrases like “like” and incomplete endings. Also correct grammar (e.g., “I had a bike” not “I do have a bike when I was a child”).

예시: I had a bike when I was a child, and it made me very happy. For example, I used to ride it around the neighborhood with my friends every afternoon, which helped me feel free and more independent.

제안: Answer directly and avoid hedging words like “I think I believe.” Use clear reasons with specific examples and linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., “people ride bikes” not “ride the bike”) and finish your sentence. Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel. For instance, many students and office workers cycle to school or work, especially in the morning, which also helps them stay fit and saves money on transport.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child and like that makes me really happy because I used to ride that bike here and there with my friends and it was really.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and it made me really happy because I used to ride it here and there with my friends.

The sentence mixes present tense 'do have' with past time reference 'when I was a child.' Use past simple 'had' to match the time frame. 'Like that makes me' is colloquial and ungrammatical here; use 'and it made me' to refer back to the past. Replace the redundant phrase 'that bike' with the pronoun 'it' for clarity. Remove the trailing incomplete 'and it was really.' Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent by using past tense for past events and use appropriate pronouns to avoid repetition.

× Yes, I think I believe that bikes are popular in my country because many people ride the bike and they live riding bike with their friends and it makes them very happy, joyful.

✓ Yes, I believe that bikes are popular in my country because many people ride bikes and enjoy riding with their friends, which makes them very happy.

The phrase 'I think I believe' is redundant; choose one verb (here 'believe'). 'Ride the bike' and 'riding bike' use incorrect articles and count forms; use plural 'ride bikes' and 'riding' with no article or use 'a bike' if singular. 'They live riding bike' is ungrammatical; use 'enjoy riding with their friends.' Combine clauses to avoid awkward repetition and ensure subject-verb agreement. Use a relative clause 'which makes them very happy' to link cause and effect.

× They feel excited when they.

✓ They feel excited when they ride bikes with their friends.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb or object after 'they.' Complete the clause by specifying the action causing excitement, for example 'ride bikes with their friends.' Ensure sentences have a subject and a predicate to be grammatically complete.