Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep answers clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence in past tense (since it is about childhood), correct verb forms, avoid redundancy and vague phrases, and add one brief specific detail using linking words. Also limit to no more than five sentences and use natural expressions (e.g., "toy electric bike" instead of "the IT works").

예시: Yes — I had a toy electric bike when I was a child. It ran on batteries and had flashing lights, which made it very attractive. Because of that, I used to ride it around our yard every afternoon. It was my favorite toy and I felt proud to show it to my friends.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and avoid unclear or incorrect words (e.g., "plethora" is misused; "activists" is wrong). Use specific reasons and one or two concise supporting details with linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Reduce hesitations and repetition, and use natural collocations like "motorbikes" or "scooters" and "commute by bike".

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people commute by motorbike or scooter because they are cheap and save time in heavy traffic. As a result, you see large numbers of bikes on city streets, especially for short trips to work or the market.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about possession in the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the response should use past tense. Use 'had' to match the past time reference.

× When I was a child it was a toy bike with the IT works with the help of batteries and cells.

✓ When I was a child it was a toy bike that worked with batteries and cells.

Original has incorrect clause structure and extra words ('the IT works with the help of'). Replace with a relative clause 'that worked' to describe the bike and use past tense 'worked' to match 'When I was a child'.

× I always go outside on that bike because it looks very attractive and it snatched my eyes.

✓ I always went outside on that bike because it looked very attractive and caught my eye.

Talking about habitual actions in the past requires past tense 'went' and 'looked'. 'Snatched my eyes' is incorrect idiom — use 'caught my eye'. Use singular 'eye' for the idiom.

× In my country there are plethora of bikes, activists and motorcycles and plethora of things.

✓ In my country there is a plethora of bicycles, scooters and motorcycles and many other things.

Use the article 'a' with 'plethora' ('a plethora of'). Also 'bikes, activists' is incorrect; likely 'bicycles, scooters' or similar. 'There is' fits with singular 'a plethora'. Use parallel nouns and 'many other things' for clarity.

× But all the people travel through bikes because they are very convenient and even if they want to go on nearby places, they just uh, sit down there, sit on their bikes and move through.

✓ But many people travel by bike because it is very convenient, and even if they want to go to nearby places they just sit on their bikes and go there.

Use 'many people' rather than 'all the people' unless meant literally. 'Travel by bike' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'Bikes' as a mode is singular collective 'it' or use 'they' for 'bikes' but better 'it is convenient' referring to the mode. Use 'go to nearby places' not 'go on nearby places' and 'go there' instead of 'move through'. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant 'sit down there'.