Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid contradiction or hesitation. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question directly, then give one or two specific supporting details. Remove filler words like “uh” and “umm,” and avoid repeating the same idea using different words (bike/bicycle).

예시: No, I didn’t own a bike as a very young child, but I had a bicycle during my school years. For example, I rode it three kilometers to school every day, which saved time and gave me exercise.

제안: Answer directly and use correct grammar and fewer fillers. Use linking words to add a reason or example. Use singular/plural correctly (e.g., ‘young people’ or ‘youngsters’ and ‘learn to ride a bike’). Provide a specific reason or brief example to support your view.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many young people learn to ride them early. For instance, most children start riding at around seven, and families often buy a simple motorcycle as their first vehicle because it is affordable and convenient.

× I did not have a bike when I was a child, but I definitely had a bicycle in my childhood, especially during my schooling age.

✓ I did not have a bike when I was a child, but I definitely had a bicycle during my school years.

Redundant and awkward time expressions: 'in my childhood' and 'during my schooling age' duplicate meaning and 'schooling age' is not natural. Use simple past 'had' is correct; shorten to 'during my school years' for clarity and naturalness. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same time reference and use natural collocations like 'school years'.

× Uh, certainly bikes are most popular in my country.

✓ Uh, certainly bikes are very popular in my country.

Phrase 'most popular' implies comparison or superlative and without 'the' before it sounds odd; context intends a general statement, so 'very popular' is better. Alternatively, 'the most popular' would need a comparison context. Change corrects misuse of superlative and improves naturalness.

× Every youngsters, uh, learn to drive bike from a young age and bikes are the first vehicles that they own.

✓ Every youngster learns to ride a bike from a young age, and bikes are the first vehicles they own.

'Every youngsters' mixes singular 'every' with plural 'youngsters'—use singular 'every youngster'. Subject-verb agreement requires 'learns'. 'Drive bike' is idiomatically 'ride a bike'. 'the first vehicles that they own' is wordier; 'they own' is enough. This fixes quantifier and agreement issues and improves verb choice.