Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, correct grammar and use clearer sequencing words. Avoid unclear phrases like “drained it with that for extra 2 wheels.” Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 2–3 supporting details (age, type of bike, a brief anecdote). Use linking words (first/then/after) and correct verb forms.

예시: Yes. I had a bike as a child. First, at three I learned to ride a tricycle, which I used for several years. Then I moved on to a blue bicycle when I was about six, and I remember practicing every evening until I could ride without help.

제안: Make the answer more natural and avoid repetition. Provide a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons or examples (training from childhood, progression to motorcycles, licensing age). Use appropriate linking words and correct small errors and redundancy.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Children usually start on tricycles, then learn to ride bicycles, and many people later move to motorcycles when they turn 18 and obtain a valid license. This gradual progression and the affordability of two-wheelers make bikes a common choice for daily transport.

× When I was three years old I got my first bike that was a tricycle.

✓ When I was three years old, I got my first bike, which was a tricycle.

The original sentence is mostly correct grammatically but needs a non-restrictive relative clause with which and commas to improve clarity and correctness. Use of 'that' implies essential information; here the clause adds extra description, so 'which' with commas is better. Suggestion: add commas around the relative clause and use 'which' for additional information.

× I rode it for a long time.

✓ I rode it for a long time.

This sentence is already correct in past tense and requires no change. It correctly uses the past simple 'rode' to describe a completed habitual action in the past. Suggestion: none needed.

× Then after I learnt riding the tricycle, I got a bicycle which was blue in color and then I drained it with that for extra 2 wheels.

✓ After I learned to ride the tricycle, I got a bicycle that was blue and later had two extra wheels added to it.

Multiple problems: 'learnt riding' is an incorrect verb pattern (should be 'learned to ride' or 'learnt to ride') and 'drained it with that for extra 2 wheels' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Blue in color' is wordy; 'blue' suffices. Use 'two' instead of numeral '2' in formal writing. The corrected sentence uses proper verb pattern, clearer passive/action phrasing, and consistent word order. Suggestion: use 'learned to ride' and express adding wheels as 'had two extra wheels added' or 'attached two extra wheels'.

× Yes, they are like in India.

✓ Yes, they are, as in India.

The phrase 'they are like in India' is awkward. Adding 'as' clarifies the comparison: 'as in India' or 'like in India' with punctuation. Also include a comma for fluency. Suggestion: use 'as in India' or 'similar to India'.

× Most of us are trained from the childhood to ride bikes starting from tricycle, then they move on to bicycle and then after that when they're 18 years old they get they get the motorcycle after getting a proper valid license.

✓ Most of us are taught from childhood to ride bikes, starting with a tricycle, then moving on to a bicycle, and finally, when we are 18 years old, we get a motorcycle after obtaining a valid license.

Several issues: 'trained from the childhood' is unnatural (use 'taught from childhood'), inconsistent pronouns ('Most of us' then 'they'), repetition 'they get they get', and wordy phrase 'proper valid license' (use 'valid license'). Tense and structure should remain present/factual generalization: use present simple for routines ('are taught', 'starting', 'move' -> 'moving'). Use consistent subject pronoun 'we' to match 'Most of us'. Suggestion: maintain consistent subject and concise phrasing: 'taught from childhood', 'starting with', 'moving on to', and 'obtaining a valid license'.