Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm, like), and give one or two specific supporting details (who owned the bike, where you rode it, a memory). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, so). Aim for 2–4 sentences and correct small grammar issues (e.g., "my own bike" not "my personal bike").

예시: I didn’t have my own bike as a child, but I often borrowed my brother’s. I rode it around our neighborhood every afternoon because it was my favorite way to play and explore with friends.

제안: Make your answer direct and eliminate repetition. Begin with a clear opinion, then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, therefore, moreover). Avoid repeating phrases ("riding car rather driving car") and correct collocations ("drive cars" not "riding car").

예시: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country. Mainly people prefer driving cars because it’s faster and more comfortable for commuting, so many choose cars over cycling.

× When I was a child, I used to ride a bike a lot, but I actually didn't have like my own, my personal bike.

✓ When I was a child, I used to ride a bike a lot, but I actually didn't have my own personal bike.

The phrase 'like my own, my personal bike' includes filler 'like' and redundant repetition which is stylistically incorrect. This is not a verb form error per se but affects clarity. Remove 'like' and the repeated possessive to form 'my own personal bike'. Suggestion: avoid fillers such as 'like' and redundant phrases to make sentences clearer.

× So I was uh, I used to use my brother's, umm, bike, but I was really into biking and interested in, so that's why I like it a lot.

✓ So I used to use my brother's bike, and I was really into biking and interested in it, so that's why I liked it a lot.

Mixed tenses and missing object: 'I was uh, I used to use' is repetitive; choose a simple past/habitual 'I used to'. 'Interested in' requires an object ('it'). Also maintain past reference: change 'I like it a lot' to 'I liked it a lot'. Ensure past participle not required here but correct verb forms and objects are needed.

× Well, I don't think so because in my country most people tend to prefer riding car rather driving car rather than riding bicycles because it's more convenient for people to get their destinations or people to commute.

✓ Well, I don't think so because in my country most people tend to prefer driving cars rather than riding bicycles, because it's more convenient for people to get to their destinations or to commute.

Preposition and article issues: use 'driving cars' (count noun requires plural) and 'get to their destinations' uses the preposition 'to'. Also remove repeated 'rather' and add 'to' before 'commute'. Improve parallel structure: 'prefer driving cars rather than riding bicycles'.

× That's why I think they don't usually ride bikes.

✓ That's why I think they don't usually ride bikes.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable, but ensure it follows from previous corrected sentence. No change needed. This is included to acknowledge correctness and preserve context.