Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and organization. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, give one or two specific supporting details, and use linking words. Correct common errors (have → had, buy → bike, write → ride, two sister → two sisters). Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences). For example, mention how old you were, what you did with your sisters, and why you enjoyed it.

예시: I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my two sisters around our neighborhood, especially in the afternoons. We enjoyed cycling together because it was good exercise and let us explore parks and streets near our home. Those rides created many happy memories for me.

제안: Work on clarity, vocabulary and sentence structure. Begin with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons and examples. Replace unclear words (vice → bikes, clubbed → cycling clubs, striking/take a bite unclear) and avoid filler sounds (uh). Mention who uses bikes (children, commuters, clubs), why (health, convenience, low cost), and give a brief example or statistic if possible. Keep to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Thailand. Many people join cycling clubs and ride for fitness or leisure, while others use bicycles for short commutes because they are cheap and convenient. For example, I often see groups of adults cycling in parks on weekends.

× Yes I have a buy whenever shines.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence has multiple issues: wrong word choice ('buy' instead of 'bike'), incorrect tense ('have' should be past 'had' to match 'when you were a child'), and ungrammatical phrase 'whenever shines' which is unclear. This falls under incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and general word choice. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'bike' and past tense 'had' to match the time reference; if you meant 'when it was new' or 'when the sun was shining' rephrase clearly.

× I loved to write a cycles with my sister.

✓ I loved to ride a bicycle with my sister.

The sentence uses incorrect verbs and nouns: 'write' is wrong (should be 'ride') and 'cycles' is a plural noun while context suggests 'a bicycle' or 'bicycles'. This is an incorrect use of words (adjectives/adverbs category covers wrong word forms). Suggestion: use the verb 'ride' for bicycles and choose correct noun form: 'ride a bicycle' or 'ride bicycles'.

× I also have two sister.

✓ I also had two sisters.

This sentence has tense and number errors: 'have' should be past 'had' to match childhood context; 'sister' should be plural 'sisters'. This is primarily singular/plural and tense, here treated as incorrect word form under adjectives/adverbs category per instruction. Suggestion: match tense to context and use plural when referring to more than one.

× We love to spend time together to cycling and we love to see an environment outside so we loved.

✓ We loved to spend time together cycling and we loved seeing the outdoors.

Original has incorrect verb patterns: 'to cycling' should be 'cycling' (gerund) or 'to ride bicycles'; 'see an environment outside' is unnatural — 'see the outdoors' or 'enjoy the outdoors' is correct. Also inconsistent tense: mix of present 'love' and past 'loved' — choose past to match childhood. This maps to issues with verb + -ing form and tense. Suggestion: keep past tense and use correct gerund forms: 'loved spending time together cycling' or 'loved to spend time cycling'.

× Yes, I think vice is popular in my countries in Thailand, they have uh, clubbed to a striking, it's a good for health and in the uh $0.60 and when it shines or adults, they love to striking and take a bite. So.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, Thailand. There are cycling clubs, and cycling is good for health. Adults often ride bicycles for exercise and leisure.

This long sentence has many errors: 'vice' should be 'bikes', 'countries' should be 'country', wrong phrases like 'clubbed to a striking' and 'take a bite' are meaningless here. Tense should be present ('are popular', 'is good') because the question asks about current popularity. This involves present tense issues, subject-verb agreement, incorrect word choice and sentence structure. Suggestion: simplify into clear present-tense statements: 'bikes are popular', 'there are cycling clubs', 'cycling is good for health', 'adults ride for exercise and leisure'.