Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "I had the bike" -> "I had a bike") and keep to a maximum of about 3–4 sentences. Use a linking word when adding the supporting detail (e.g., "and", "so", "because"). Also correct minor grammatical issues ("for my 7th birthday" is fine; keep tense consistent).

예시: Yes, I had a bike as a child. It was a small red bike with training wheels that my parents gave me for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it around the park near our house almost every weekend.

제안: Be careful with tense and word choice, and make the idea more specific. Use a clear topic sentence, then add a reason or example with a linking word (e.g., "because" or "for example"). Avoid vague phrases like "most of the people"; instead say "many people" or "a lot of people." Also correct word order: "mostly at sunrise and sunset" or "in the morning and at sunset."

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many people ride along the seaside in the morning and again at sunset for exercise and relaxation.

× Well yes, I had the bike when I was a child.

✓ Well yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The definite article 'the' incorrectly specifies a particular bike; use the indefinite article 'a' to refer to one of possible bikes in general. Suggestion: use 'a' when introducing something not previously mentioned.

× Most of the people rode their bicycles near the sea in the morning and at sunset mostly.

✓ Most people rode their bicycles near the sea in the morning and at sunset.

Redundant adverb placement ('mostly' at end) and 'Most of the people' is unnatural here; use 'Most people'. The sentence is past tense which matches the context, but remove redundant 'mostly' and place time expressions ('in the morning and at sunset') at the end. Suggestion: use 'Most people' and avoid redundant adverbs.