Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (use articles and verb forms), and include one specific detail to support your answer. Use linking words like "so" or "however" to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I often borrowed bikes from my friends and rode around the neighborhood. Because my family couldn’t afford one at the time, I relied on friends or neighbors whenever I wanted to cycle.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then add a clear reason and a specific example. Remove filler words (e.g., "uh") and fix tense consistency. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to make your explanation coherent, and finish the sentence completely.

예시: Yes, bicycles are still very popular in my country. This is because many people use them for short trips and children often play outside rather than using smartphones. For example, when I was growing up, kids regularly rode bikes together around the neighborhood after school.

× I did not have a bike, but then I remembered asking bike from my friends and then riding their bike because I didn't have bike at that time.

✓ I did not have a bike, but I remember borrowing bikes from my friends and riding their bikes because I didn't have a bike at that time.

The original uses 'asking bike' and 'didn't have bike' which are incorrect noun forms. 'Bike' needs an article 'a' when singular (a bike), but when referring to multiple friends' bicycles, plural 'bikes' is appropriate. Also 'asking bike from my friends' is unnatural; use 'borrowing bikes from my friends'. Use consistent singular/plural and correct verbs.

× As far as I remember it, I did not have a bike, but then I remembered asking bike from my friends and then riding their bike because I didn't have bike at that time.

✓ As far as I remember, I did not have a bike, but I remember borrowing bikes from my friends and riding their bikes because I didn't have a bike at that time.

Mixed past tense forms 'remembered' and 'did not have' create inconsistency. 'As far as I remember' is present-tense phrase used to report a past situation; keep 'remember' in present or make all past. Using 'I remember' with past actions is natural. Also change 'remembered asking' to 'remember borrowing' for clarity and correct tense usage.

× I remembered asking bike from my friends and then riding their bike because I didn't have bike at that time.

✓ I remember borrowing bikes from my friends and then riding their bikes because I didn't have a bike at that time.

The phrase 'asking bike from' uses wrong preposition and verb. Use 'borrow from' or 'borrowed from'. 'Borrow from someone' is correct prepositional structure. Also use articles appropriately: 'a bike'.

× So most of the time we ride bicycle with the friends, our neighbors, kids and.

✓ Most of the time we rode bicycles with our friends, neighbors, and other kids.

Verb tense should match past context: 'ride' should be 'rode'. 'Bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' when speaking of group activities. The phrase 'the friends' is unnecessary; use 'our friends'. Also the sentence ended abruptly; add 'and other kids' to complete the list.

× I would say yes, uh, in my country bicycles are very popular because during my time we didn't have any kind of technologies or mobile phones when I was a child.

✓ I would say yes. In my country, bicycles were very popular because during my childhood we didn't have technologies or mobile phones.

Mixing present 'are very popular' with past context 'during my time' causes tense inconsistency. Since the speaker refers to their childhood, use past tense 'were very popular' or rephrase to maintain present if speaking generally. Also 'any kind of technologies' is awkward; use 'technologies' or 'mobile phones' without 'any kind of'.