Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, use correct tense and word order, and avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence in past tense, add one or two supporting details using linking words, and keep it within 3–5 sentences. Focus on specific memories (where you rode it, who taught you) and correct grammar (e.g., 'I had a bike', 'my parents bought it for me', 'I learned to ride quickly').

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me for my seventh birthday, and my older brother taught me how to ride. Because I practised every day, I learned to ride very quickly and felt very proud and excited.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structures (e.g., 'not very popular', 'people usually use motorbikes', 'there are few bike lanes'). Provide one or two concrete examples such as commuting habits or infrastructure.

예시: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorbikes for commuting because they are faster and more convenient, and there are few dedicated bike lanes in cities. For example, many students and workers ride motorbikes to school or work rather than cycling.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about possession in the past ('Did you have... when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense. Using present tense 'have' is inconsistent. Use 'had' to match the past-time reference. Suggestion: Pay attention to time markers (when I was a child) and use past tense verbs accordingly.

× When I was a child, I my parents bought it for me immediately.

✓ When I was a child, my parents bought it for me.

The sentence includes an extra misplaced pronoun 'I' and the adverb 'immediately' is unnecessary and awkward here. The structure should be subject + verb: 'my parents bought'. Remove 'I' and the adverb unless you intend a specific meaning. Suggestion: Keep clear subject-verb order and avoid stray words; include adverbs only if they add meaning.

× I came, I could drive so quickly.

✓ At first I couldn't, but I learned to ride very quickly.

The original 'I came, I could drive so quickly' is unclear and mixes verbs incorrectly. 'Came' is not the right verb for starting to ride a bike. Also ability in the past is better expressed with 'could' after learning. The corrected version clarifies progression: initially unable, then learned quickly. Suggestion: Use verbs that match the intended action (learn/ride) and show sequence with words like 'at first' or 'then'.

× So I very, I'm very happy when I have a bike.

✓ So I was very happy when I had a bike.

The student mixes present and past ('I'm' and 'have') while the context is past (childhood). Use past tense 'was' and 'had' to be consistent. Also remove the stray 'very,' repetition. Suggestion: Maintain consistent tense throughout a description of past events.

× Actually by some not popular in my country.

✓ Actually, bikes are not very popular in my country.

The original lacks a clear subject and uses incorrect word order and words ('by some'). Use 'bikes are not very popular' to state the general situation. Suggestion: Include the subject ('bikes') and use correct auxiliary 'are' for present general statements.

× My country is people usually use motorbike, road work and go to school.

✓ In my country, people usually use motorbikes to commute to work and to go to school.

The sentence has incorrect word order and missing prepositions. 'My country is people...' is ungrammatical. Use 'In my country, people usually use motorbikes' and add 'to' before verbs indicating purpose ('to commute to work' or 'to go to school'). Also plural 'motorbikes' fits general statement. Suggestion: Start location phrases with 'In my country' and use 'to' + verb for purpose.

× Also we don't have the only St. for bike.

✓ Also, we don't have dedicated bike lanes/paths.

'the only St.' is unclear and incorrect article usage; likely the student meant 'dedicated streets' or 'bike lanes'. Use 'dedicated bike lanes' or 'paths' for clarity and correct noun choice. Suggestion: Use clear nouns like 'bike lanes' and avoid abbreviations like 'St.' unless referring to a street name; include articles only when necessary.